A Swan to me

A Swan to me

A Poem by Rossen
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dancing and playing by the edge of the sea

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Charging downhills... fear lost to the wind
blue eyed dusty blond with a mile of grin 
mud balls with plum centers to the neighbor boys head's
arm wrestles and sleep overs,in sheet fort bunk beds
dancing and playing by the edge of the sea
her partner, strewn kelp and giant seaweed
she once won a foot race... the entire fifth grade!
the strongest and fastest in all sports she played
together we flew a kite till we used up all the string
she let it go just to run it down and catch that falling thing 
over the tall grassy hills of sand I heard a man say,he is
the fastest boy I ever did see. I said to him,"he is a she"
my stepdaughter such a little tomboy... a Swan to me...
on her eleventh birthday I gave to her,her first dress
she cleans up so nicely dusty hair no longer a mess..
indigo blue paisley,shiny shoes and a ribbon for her hair
all grown up now, I so miss her.. chasing string in the air..

© 2014 Rossen


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How sweet I am a tom boy reminds me of myself when I was little.


Thank you for sharing this lovely piece and thank you for your
lovely review and comments.


I loved these stanza's lines.


over the tall grassy hills of sand I heard a man say, he is

the fastest boy I ever did see. I said to him, "he is a she"

my stepdaughter such a little tomboy... a Swan to me...



Blessings. kindred poet


Posted 7 Years Ago


I agree with Frieda, the rhythm is light, but meaningful: I especially like the line "he is a she my stepdaughter such a little tomboy ... a Swan to me .."

Posted 7 Years Ago


What an enchanting read, has that feeling of youthful freedom...such a sweet tribute to your swan...love this one Rossen.

Posted 7 Years Ago


oh, so beautiful, even if she neverr chooses the dress . . . a female enchantress as natural as all outdoors

Posted 7 Years Ago


Thank you for publishing this poem. It was so much fun to read and imagine the fun sleepovers and kite flying. Very beautiful and moving. Absolutely love it. 100/100

Posted 7 Years Ago


You have touched my heart with this gorgeous poem...the last line is so perfect. A stunning piece of poetry!

:) Julie

Posted 7 Years Ago


  Rossen

7 Years Ago

Truly grateful Julie,your poems are inspiring to me.Thank you!
I love this ... you had me from the start .
Many say rhyme is thing of the past
But WTH do they know
This is good, a wonderful little story
Put to verse..
Memories always make the best poems

Well done.......... Jasmine

Posted 7 Years Ago


  Rossen

7 Years Ago

Hard to shake the past...you know Green eggs and ham,and that Cat in the hat,
i think held me.. read more
J. J.  Nightingale

7 Years Ago

I don't think it held you back at all ! .. I use rhyme and free verse .. because I like them... and .. read more
This is stunning and I am always so moved when I read you hon...delicate and so beautiful ♥

Posted 7 Years Ago


  Rossen

7 Years Ago

thank you Ruth,I like the smile you bring.
Ruth

7 Years Ago

I like the smile you bestow :) And welcome love x
"indigo blue paisley,shiny shoes and a ribbon for her hair
all grown up now, I so miss her.. chasing string in the air.."
I'm glad the world had changed. Woman can be fast, swim and fly down mountains. I did like the above lines. Young girls do change. I watched them grow-up too fast for a father's heart. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote



Posted 7 Years Ago


This was so lovely.Your words drip of emotion :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Rossen

7 Years Ago

Thank you,for this review, for the smile too Vidya..
Vidya Bacchus

7 Years Ago

Most welcome my friend :)

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