On the waves

Like as the waves make towards the pebbl'd shore, so do our minutes, hasten to their end. William Shakespeare

Words out of shells

phrases of sand

the wind that brings them

and rocks it on the waves

 

a seagull

squawks in between

 

I’m drowning in their sounds

they take me away

forever so deep

in the sea

 

my thoughts are streaming

through my head in my hands

on my paper they float as

 

words out of shells.

 

© Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere

31/10/2014

 

Reviews

[Tks]

The form of this poem is lovely..very much like a wave..the metaphorical use of your words invokes a multiple sensory catachresis that is yet simple onto the eyes. Nothing overstated here..just feeling the simplicity of Nature intertwine into your words as seashells. It gets better as I read it, so expect me to reread it again :)

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thanks a lot for this fine review, means a great deal to me. Have a good day. :) Rudi

[Cherrie Palmer]

Excellent journey I like the use of imagery and the phase:
I'm drowning in their sounds

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Cherrie, for reading my poem. :) Rudi

[Willard Wells]

Very interesting analogy you have put forth here. Very nice words and imagery.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Willard, always nice to read your comment. :) Rudi

[wordman]

you painted a lovely image here ..

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Wordman. :) Rudi

[Ana B.]

This poems settled piece over me, its a rare thing, wonderfully penned, dear Rudi!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Ana, glad you liked it. Have a good day. :) Rudi

[B]

I really do believe shells speak
Something so mystical about this write

Love it

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Nisreen, for passing by and read my poem. Glad you liked it. :) Rudi

[Not here]

love these shells :) brings back great memories. thank you Rudi

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Dante, for passing by. :) Rudi

[Robert]

Loved listening to shells when I was a child. Loved the sea as well and still do. Rudi this piece brought me back to that time if only for a brief moment, thanks.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Robert, for the nice comment, glad I could do that for you. :) Rudi

[Kelly Scheppers]

I am minutes away from one of many beaches here in California. There's something special about the ambience of this piece, that resonates with being there and feeling at home with nature.

You've captured it well, Rudi...both in words and imagery!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, Kelly, for the nice words. Glad you liked it. :) Rudi

[Coyote Poetry]

I do understand this poem. I love the sea.
"I’m drowning in their sounds
they take me away
forever so deep
in the sea"
I need a few years near the Pacific ocean. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Thank you, John, for reading and reviewing. Have a good weekend, my friend. :) Rudi

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Rudi.