Admiration

To the most modest beautiful young lady that I've known Whose unconditional charm are so sweet and tendering. From the moment I heard the first word from her lips your sweet harmonised voice when you indulge in conversation deepens the soul feeling chilled and relaxed. Whose laugh is the highlight of my day. Crystal white teeth like a diamond chandalier radiates your smile.

Reviews

[Cassie]

This is so cute, I hope this modest most beautiful lady got to read this.

[Nathaniel Williams]

Cassie i hope that she does comes into my life its been to long. Thanks for your kind words.

[bobc]

I kind of like this piece but the choice of structure makes it just a little hard to read. That's OK though.

Just had some questions for you?

1. '...charm...'...did you mean 'charms' as in plural?
2. '...from her lips...'...did you mean '...from your lips...'?
3. '...when you indulge... deepens...'...did you mean '...when you indulged... deepened...' as in the past tense established by 'From the moment I heard...' at the beginning of the line?

Keep at it...enjoyed this...bob

[Nathaniel Williams]

Thanks bob it' was a character I created narrating their thoughts so their vocabulary is not as articulate and structured, so I was trying a new element where it was puzzling thanks for your kind words.