To Whom It May Concern

Don't let yourself get dragged down by negative people.

I remember when I first met you
You were my reflection
In a foggy mirror
Your presence was an
Intangible miracle
And the glimmer in your eye
Could pierce a diamond

You dug a ditch for us
To reside in
Away from the judgment
Of the outside world
And we slept under the stars
Between walls of dirt

But you dug yourself
Too deep
And you're screaming for air

I am not your savior
I will not throw you a rope
I will not allow my shoulder
To be dampened with your tears

I am sliced open by fragments
Of your mistakes
Limping towards solitude
Begging for peace

I know that one day
You'll be freed from that hole
And you'll see that life
Has much more to offer
Than what you think

I'll see you then

Reviews

[The Spaniard]

You are a very passionate writer and it resonates in your work. sorry it took so long to respond but I am more available now and i'd love to read more. Some absolutly great memorable lines as well.

[Natasha Ashway]

My mind marinates in your description and metaphor. There be deep, exquisite phrases 'ere!

I am sliced open by fragments / Of your mistakes

What a line.

It's a sad poem; a farewell to a relationship that was addictively intoxicating while it lasted, until it grew poisonous, obviously. The whole story is told, and the picture of the love cocoon is firmly nested in our minds.

Nice. In fact quite splendid!

Thanks for sharing your heart. We, your readers, appreciate it.

[Adela Muresan]

I like the first 16 verses, but then I was kind of disappointed by the attitude shown towards the girl - so cold �

If you, or some guy loved her he would have felt the same pain as her, and he wouldn't have left her ALONE.

As for the mistakes � Newsflash : we all do them.

No offence pal, but this eight's no hell of a love poem.

A.M.

[Bellarina]

Wow. I wasn't expecting that. You swung me for a loop. Not many can do that. This is an astounding piece of literature. Definately worthy of winning a contest.

[Phil Sanders]

Cleverly written .. lovely flow to the poem ...

[ANNA]

I say your poetry just open my eyes
This piece had so much emotion that i began to dig myself deeper into your word
Picturing every tear, every reflection
Taking the mirror of your poem and piecing it up on the wall
This is very well written
Look like your put your all into
A letter, a verb and a noun
Great job!!

Anna

[Pj]

This is what I should be saying to some people who drag on and on about everything that's going wrong, rather than focusing on what is good. (But I can't turn people away lol).
This is amazing, such a simple topic that gets over looked- but you worked it well and polished it for our viewing.
Really strong and hard hitting :)

[Valentine]

This is a good one kid...there are a lot of people that we meet in life that are so negative and down all of the time if we were around them too much we ourselves might get depressed..I just pray for them and stay far..far away..It is hard enough in this world today to carry around our own problems than haveing to carry someone elses...God bless...Valentine

[Brandon Taylor-Black]

Raw and powerful writing. We can only stand by and watch the self destruction of others....for it is their life to learn their own lessons.
This is some truly excellent writing.
Bravo!

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