A Poem by satanic666

The enemy i never saw coming....Chris.......dushbag




How could i see what was coming

from an adversary as subtle as thee

U bided ur time and waited patiently

Just so you could steal my love from me  


I tried to be nice

I was even mean 

after all i tried to do for you

all you could do was deceive 


U took everything from me

my heart my love 

my very being 

and my only way of life  


Now i see you clearly now

you are my mortal enemy

forever will i hold this grudge

until she comes back to me 


as for you death will never come quick as long as i live 

the hate i hold for you will never fade

no one else will take you to your end

for i have your fate especially reserved for me   


For you are my mortal ENEMY




© 2008 satanic666

Author's Note

I will write the story for this soon so dont judge until i have the adequate time to write it. only then will you understand if you dont already.

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"I tried to be nice

I was even mean "

I love this line! Its a satire almost as if you are ridiculing the person you tried to be nice but I was even mean.

Posted 14 Years Ago

It is a good poem, but the U and the UR greatly detract from message.

Posted 14 Years Ago

i like this alot. it shows true love being broken. which has happened to me alot. this poems means alot to me. it is very good

Posted 14 Years Ago

Dude I love it,
I know exaclty who your talking about
and I feel the same way about alot of people
just not in as deep of a hatred as you

Posted 14 Years Ago

The hatred expressed in this poem is so real...its f*****g awesome =)
I love the rage, bitterness and anger expressed in this poem because it was expressed so well
nice =)

Posted 14 Years Ago

What's not to understand? Now, this poem, did you try to start out as rhyming? In the first stanza, and maybe in the second, you rhymed. It seemed like you gave up. Was that intentional?

Posted 14 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this piece because some of us (me) have had this happen to us, and know how it feels...Thanks for writing this piece I enjoyed this, especially since this is all too real for me.Keep up the good work! =)

Posted 14 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The poem expresses it well. The hate over someone the you did so much for. He took everthing you treasured away, and by the sound even your habbats. I like the poem, let me know when you have your story up, I would like to read it.

Posted 14 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Added on June 16, 2008
Last Updated on July 28, 2008



hatteras, NC

my name is jordan clarke and im a 17 year old devout satanist that has given up on love. mostly i write about love that was lost and will never be found again and i write for those that have been wro.. more..


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