to you

i worry i am not enough for you

i worry that it was all a fancy

i worry that its all gone awry

i love you

i loved you

i'm scared

because i'm so prone to change

as i grow a little bit older

to find myself

in this world of ours

i wonder

where i stand in your life

i wondered

if i was forgotten

i look at the photographs we took that day

remembering the moments

behind the film

 

i remember

 

i rember that day upon your bed

i remember the night i went there

crying inside and frightened

i stood at your door

wanting some comfort

not knowing what was instore

you have changed quite a bit

my lover of hues

but what is this

i've forgotten the ques

i don't know where i'm going anymore

i don't know what i'm looking for

i don't know why i'm here today

but darling

one day

 

i remember

 

when valentines came

i was frustrated and angered

because of the day

 

until i'm of age

it has to be this way

the way that is scilenced

the way that is dreadful

the way that keeps us apart for the day

i wish i could hug you

i wish i could say

i want to see you more

every day

but for now

and for this day

it has to be kept at bay

from one to another i'll see your sweet face

but for a little longer

i'll be locked away

 

but darling

in a few weeks, or in a few days, i could be dead, or different in ways

i could be screaming in merciles pain

i could be fighting

i could be running

who is to say

 

but i remember

you and i

every day

Reviews

[Mr. Deft Diction]

I like your voice in this work. There's a naivety, a maturity, a certainty, and an uncertainty in it, all at the same time.

There's also this feeling as if maybe you're too young for him. Or he's too young for you....??? Maybe not even anything to do with age. Maybe class/circumstance, perhaps?

Either way, I'm intrigued by this piece. It resonates within me somehow. Nice job!

[Laraine Davis]

wow. meghan. this is amazing. i really like it. iwasnt quite sure who u were talking about. At first, I thought you meant mom, cuz your voice seemed to aim toward the concepts of what she does. But then, i read some of the other reviews and realized u were talking about a boy...

[emmajoy]

This is something special; you've mixed emotions with doubts with living with aging with dreams - with so much... and, most of all love. It's so well put together too. I feel it.

[larryb]

Nicely done , i can see you have talent , dont ever stop writing.........

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This is great. I felt that before as well. This is a great piece though.

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This is quite excellent and you are right, you are older than your years. You evoke emotion well without sounding syrupy and maudlin. Peoples g. Riot gave you a well thought out review. Your poetry is good. Often people write garbage and have spelling and grammatical errors ... to me it does not matter because their poetry is bad. Yours is good. The spelling errors in your case interfere with your music and at times the meaning of your poem. EXCELLENT!

[Rain]

Reading this piece does give me the feel of waiting...for what I'm not sure. I can feel the powerful emotions. Alot of unanswered questions, but still a good piece. Rain..

[Samantha Conway]

peoples g. riot is right...

[Flow]

This was a very good write with plenty of emotions from the heart. Some parts are sad as i can feel that empty longing for something that isn't presently fully in your life and the pain of not having it. I was really surprised by this poem, it was better than I thought it was going to be. You have talent and you have it abundantly.

[robin]

The "ques" is that for question or did you mean "queue" as in cue or line up? I love you trembling depth your sorrows rise above old shattered hopes and makes me want to be the one remembered with you here. Many people have lived you pain and are as happy as you to be, still, again and again, with wide open feeling. Refreshing honesty and too much clarity from such a young "old soul".

[Cylis Derrens]

I am deeply interested in the circumstances of this poem. The speaker seems to be looking back on their relationship right before something bad is about to happen. There are a few typos, but there is great potential in this work. :)