o fresh water: galore

a poem

 

 

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Fresh

Water: Galore

 

Sand under my feet

in between my toes,

skinny dipping

with furtive throws,

skin wrinkling in

calm surrender,

fatigued to the core,

waves wail with

conflating abrasions,

wondering tides of

humid persuasions,

plentiful, eventful,

drowning out the

cry of seagulls,

of human foibles,

on earth’s placid shore.

 

 

 

Author's Note

If you view the poem sideways, you might see a griefless, finless fish
Reviews would be welcome

Reviews

[David Aiello]

Having read it once out loud, and my first read of it, I stopped, knowing I had just spoken something lovely enough to create a space of reflection, in the suddenness of its conclusion.
And I f*****g love that it is shaped like a fish.

Your excellence is boundless, I'm going to go read it again.

(thank you always for the read request!)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Well Hello David,
I must say that this one is a personal
favourite of mine and I am absolutely
chuffed that this poem should appeal
to you as it does,
really, thank you ever so much :) !!
Sheema

[Dean]

again, intriguing as are all of your writes...this one encompassing erotic interests--intended or not--but skinny dipping plus those wondering tides, conflating abrasions and human foibles led me there, although I have in the past seen myself as one of the dirty old men---perhaps my own skin hath surrendered too much. To be fair, layered poetry such as this one does offer many interpretations and flights of fancy;
My idea of a griefless fish included!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I had not considered an erotic stance to be quite honest, nonetheless, thanks kindly for dropping by Dean.

[lee von cleef]

good 'ol salt water to wrinkle my fingers and turn my lips blue , an oh how fun it is to swim in the nick.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hello there Lee Von Cleef, very nice to hear from you, thank you.

[HeavenSunArcadez]

the whole write was as fluid as its title.... its amazing how u put words so well together and write so beautifully its like your words bring your poems to life... this watery poem was definitely a delight to read... thanks for posting an makes me wanna go to the beach right now.. lol great write

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hey HeavenSunDracadez, me too, in actual fact, I was no where near a beach when this was drafted, rather this was a plight for refreshing seaside indulgence, and idyllic escape, which I am pleased to report that I have fulfilled in some respects. Having said this, partial cleansing only goes a partial way and such a pursuit is of course gradual and long term.....you know to revitalise one's own aims and values ( via mind, body and spirit), thanks ever so much, again for reviewing so supremely, and always for your in-depth engagement.

[Introspective Mind]

from a morbid ocean of thoughts waves of dreams rise, roll and break, one after another, in weary repetitions while the foundation of civilization flourishes only with wrinkles of aging.....no escape until the hopes of fresh waves succeed.....very nice thought and wonderful poetic reflection of it.....great work, Sheema !!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

What a tremendously refreshing tide of philosophical depth from you, Introspective Mind, I am so grateful.....you have written a new poem, all together, simply wonderful :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Nice poem. I miss the beach right now because summertime is over.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Thanks ever so much Dhaye.

[L.Edward]

Sublime. Makes me miss the ocean. Calm surrender: I love that feeling. Water is humble because it flows down hill to let itself be below everything else. By becoming small it becomes bigger than everything else. The ocean embodies the experience of vastness and realisation of our inseperability with all other streams of conciousness. For this reason the experience of the ocean is one of great bliss for me.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Capturing a novel moment of peaceful, sanguine streams of thought and streams of steady splashing fresh water on an idyllic day, treading in soft grains of warm, moist sand and the temperature is as even keeled as one's own blood flow, thanks very much for this most enchanting review L. Edward!

[L.Edward]

Your welcome. Many Blessings!

[Kristin Lee]

I love the imagery in this one. The over all feel truly made me want to go to the beach. And your note is correct, from the side I do see some sort of finless fish, which is interesting and adds to the whole beach feel. Great job!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Hi Kristen, thank you so very much

[Mark]

cute! I love the ocean. It feels so primal. Enjoyed the read.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Good for you, thank you for commenting Mark.