MELODIOUS JUMBLE

MELODIOUS JUMBLE

A Poem by SHEEMA HUQ
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A jumbled word poem

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Melodious Jumble

bothered  be I can

alert quite I am

since out dusk

gig from in just

of levitating twangs

diverse of fidgeting fans

hypnotic rhythms uncanny

warmth sweltering drifts

guitar down beaten rifts

to wanting  not retort

at children cheeky as token

scold  homes from  or broken

 

© 2013 SHEEMA HUQ


Author's Note

SHEEMA HUQ
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Very interesting. World jumbles are not my favorite format, but I enjoyed this one. I like how you used the red lettering in correlation with talking about sweltering heat. I also like how your poem was shaped like a guitar and you spoke about the hypnotic rhythms of your guitar. Very well crafted.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SHEEMA HUQ

9 Years Ago

Hi Kristen, belated thanks yous, for sharing your valuable views, I shall come by to reply to your r.. read more



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It was excellent.
I read it three time to myself out loud just now, twice in earlier weeks.
That space, it felt like a concert;
whether or not that is in any way correct, I enjoyed it very much.
^___________^

(thank you for the read request!)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SHEEMA HUQ

9 Years Ago

Hi David, nice to hear from you again, thanks kindly.
Elegant, swift, imaginative, and easy to read. I love it. Thanks. David

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SHEEMA HUQ

9 Years Ago

Thank you so very much David
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Pax
an intriguing feeling is felt... I love the shape... this poem gives a sad vibe... i like it my friend..

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SHEEMA HUQ

9 Years Ago

Kind wishes Pax, thank you!
Pax

9 Years Ago

your welcome my friend...
loved it I.....showed imagination it....you thank

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SHEEMA HUQ

9 Years Ago

my, oh, pleasure, reader, dear
Fun to tie life together ,to pepper the words just so ...they hang on the edge of my mind... then they tumble into another thought and another till the bow is a whole, Tie made from a night on the town,So Ho Bound.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SHEEMA HUQ

9 Years Ago

An affectionate tribute, that was all bottled up and carbonated, shaken, not stirred and bubbling ou.. read more
i liked this very nicely written miss sheema :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SHEEMA HUQ

9 Years Ago

Hello there, thanks Peter
Loved it, but i adore all your work... this was very well creative and loved how u kept it original and unorthodox ... the first time i was reading I was reading for the rhythm and flow.... second time i was reading to have an understanding... it appeared to me as some sound or melody caught your attention as a concert of some sort, and you were just living it up enjoying the whole moment and experience.... hope im not too far off from your meaning, but loved it... great write..and kudos for originality

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SHEEMA HUQ

9 Years Ago

Hey there HeavenSunArcadez, I am truly flattered by your very generous appraisal, it is rare to rece.. read more
Interesting though couldn't understand much, but is really creative and the layout looks like a bottle if we observe...bottle of ketchup? :p thanks for sharing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SHEEMA HUQ

9 Years Ago

Glad for your review..... I was thinking that this was a liquid of some sort rather than a condiment.. read more
reading this from bottom to top gives off a far different feel and obsorption. I like the idea, competency
rather than structure..
nicely written.
dana

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SHEEMA HUQ

9 Years Ago

Hello Dana, your thoughts are much appreciated, thanks very much.
The structure appears to house a particular figure, otherwise, I was entertained.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SHEEMA HUQ

9 Years Ago

Pleased to hear this, thanks for your review Tai.

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Added on June 4, 2013
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SHEEMA HUQ
SHEEMA HUQ

LONDON , ENGLAND, United Kingdom



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