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Response To The Walls Of Dead Breath

Response To The Walls Of Dead Breath

A Poem by S.S.P.

I was written a few days back by a woman (that i'd given a positive review to) who was flaunting her vast education while equating my writing with "lessers" and the "lower class". I accept her accusations whole heartedly and as a badge of honor. 7/9/09


 some possess a parchment

from the fools who played it safe

who teach the tame

to stick to well paved avenues

steering tight between the lies

of boulevard patois

to steady rocking rafts

with vapid motions of the (E) variety

in razor straight and sterile paths

buffered from the base and savage lives

led untrained on the circuitous back streets

and alleys of blood laid bare

pen to a page

animalistic in honesty

and unfettered by the laws of the lettered


I could not have been more pleased

with the wailing wall of your opinion

and for the dusty map you have enclosed

stolen from the talent

of generations dead hands.

piss be unto you and yours

and may the frail arms of feeble words

carry you in continued silence

to a safe and speedy fade.




© 2009 S.S.P.

Author's Note

... don't get twisted. this isn't a "blanket" statement

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Dear S.S. Privette,

I'm glad this is not a blanket statement. I think there are people out there, educated/not educated, that will look down their noses at anyone. One of my favorite quotes from my father is that people always complain that they don't have enough money, they don't have enough time, they don't have enough good luck, but when it comes to brains they always think God has given them more than everyone else.

Education is a gift that not all receive. It helps you by allowing you to stand on the "shoulder's of giants", but this doesn't mean you'll necessarily see further. Lots of people on the ground have better eyesight.

My very best regards,


Posted 13 Years Ago

Harsh! :) Well said.

Posted 13 Years Ago

(I forgot to rate this!)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Well versed you are my friend and ... have I got one for you! Let me give you a heads up on it first then I'll post it. This author friend of mine was more or less was given critism on her writing (much like your reviewer did of yours) and was quite rude about it. In my friends writing, she WASN'T writing about lovemaking or a sexual act, just a sense of how her body felt in the moment of things (the character in the writing was by herself...alone). So, this reviewer thought she was writing about lovemaking and told her she needed to get laid because her description was so blah. I thought how rude and stupid was she especially if she truly read it correctly she would know that right off! So, I wrote something back to this person to show her that all things read are NOT what they seem! Now...go read.

Posted 13 Years Ago

Piss be unto you and yours. EPIC

Posted 13 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Rules are for dorks. That's my opinion. There always has to be one bad egg in the bunch. Motivation leads to emotion and emotion leads to greatness. Great...

Posted 13 Years Ago

Ah! The plot behind this piece is very unique indeed I must have to admit!
And that is what made it such a thoughtful piece of writing.
I really believe that you should ask her to read it out for you :)
Great write overall, but though the flow could be much better :) :)

Posted 13 Years Ago

0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I have felt like writing this type of statement to people on here before. Pat on the back for the guts. Fantastic! true poets don't follow other people's rules... they create their own. This woman obviously doesn't understand that.

Posted 13 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Give it to her! ha! I really enjoyed reading this, as I do all of your writing. I always wish I could come up with something this good when I'm angry, but I'm afraid that's the one time I sound really ignorant. Well done, my new friend!

Piss be unto her, indeed! ;)

Posted 13 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Added on July 8, 2009
Last Updated on July 13, 2009



SouthWest, VA

36 y/o going on 90, here now, gotta do something to keep the next half interesting. Aside from the poems I am also a failed musician, artist and capitalist. Feel free to write if you like, i'm only .. more..

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