Distorted Facade

Distorted Facade

A Poem by Sparrow
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No matter how beautiful one may seem to be aesthetically, when looking through the correct lens, say the internet for example, you can see the true beauty, the one on the inside.

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Caught pristine water
distorting the pretty face
show the true fractures

© 2008 Sparrow


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Sparrow
Written in Senryu format

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you could see the true beauty, only if they let you see it...or you could think you are seeing it even tho its only a big fat lie...

I loved the Senryu format you used...not an easy way to write my dearest pretiest friend

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is how it is done. Three lines that give a wealth of insight.

A worthy read

Posted 12 Years Ago


Well said - I'm not sure what lens one must look through to see the true sense of another - I imagine it may take years. Nice write. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very unique image, yet revealing the truth: only pristine water can cleanse one's face and showing one's true colours ...

Short but powerful, words very well chosen!

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


That's a new format for me...;) But, I certainly like the condensed version and the lyrics are quite compelling.

Good work!

Daniel

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Curious.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is an excellent senryu, your last line ties in beautifully with the title, your word choice is terrific to the meaning behind this piece, said with so few words. Nice work
Antony

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Beautifully written in simplicity, my friend. Great Write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful and simplistic. I love this. The ugly self emerges from a feigned veil of beauty. It's great.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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