Love

Love

A Poem by Sabrina M

Two maverick souls masquerade
So nude, so wanton, so bare
Lovers up for inbound storms unfair
Painting love a sinful shade of red
Lust entwining lust, no shred of care
Now silence rules dusty, derelict rooms
Cracked mirrors and soiled beds
Telling abject tales of unforeseen pain
The wages of sin, an ocean of tears
Forbidden from ever being shed
Could just a few, fast and fleeting strokes
Played on robbed, trespassed terrain
Leave such cruel, indelible stains?
Condemning rogue hearts to bleed
By the lashes of a harsh, killing rain
The sting not a part of the luscious bargain
If naked flames undulating on surging waves
And stray kites soaring in torrid winds
To their dismal, tattered fates must bend...
So must scarlet dream’s spun with stolen love
Surely and swiftly find their bitter, forlorn end
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© 2020 Sabrina M


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Illicit love and the passion and trouble it causes in the aftermath. Passion is fleeting for the most part but the negative effects of such an encounter can linger in the air for much longer. It's a matter of choice in the heat of the moment and dealing with the consequences afterwards. It's an idea that has varying degrees of interpretation, depending on where we reside. It's an interesting theme and one well conveyed with pace and imagery.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sabrina M

4 Months Ago

Orange from Australia. Those who never love never feel the human highs and lows that should be felt .. read more
Orange

4 Months Ago

Sorry no time waste different definitions here, have good day
Sabrina M

4 Months Ago

Thats absolutely not a problem and I am open to comments from you on anything of mine that does matc.. read more



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By the lashes of a harsh, killing rain
The sting not a part of the luscious bargain

Really love this part, This is deep and well written

Posted 4 Months Ago


I get a hint of the kind of intimacy shared between two people, who fail to develop meaningful connections even after they have gotten so close to each other, described in this poem. Those kind of relationships have different motives, where two consenting adults just chase their own need fulfilment, are probably seeking validation for their actual selves from people beyond their partners, or trying to spark their individual marriages. There's a perceivable emotional void left in people who're just together for the physical aspect, as they can no more differentiate between the love they're giving to various kinds of people.

I liked the poetry, I like the emotions woven between the lines, I felt in harmony with the message here. I could resonate with the feeling as I value emotional connections more than physical ones. Thank you Sabrina for this great piece.

Posted 4 Months Ago


forbidden love always seems to be the ones we chase

Posted 4 Months Ago


Illicit love runs the gambit of all the emotions, from the heady heights to the sunken lows of guilt. So wonderfully expressed here. Well done.

Chris

Posted 4 Months Ago


Sabrina M

4 Months Ago

Thank you for reading this poetry. I shall refine it more as I go along and this is a learning phase.. read more


You do not need to practice writing poetry my friend ... a compelling tale of stolen love .. quite beautiful with rough edges that make it feel real ...

Posted 4 Months Ago


Neville

4 Months Ago


... you are far more than just welcome my friend ..
Sabrina M

4 Months Ago

I thank you and everyone here. It has been a great discovery, writers cafe.
Neville

4 Months Ago


............................... :)
damn, this is good...almost like an illicit love affair with the passion of Romeo and Juliet, but with guilt
that kills the conscience.
well done.
j.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Sabrina M

4 Months Ago

We as thinking feeling humans are always caught and cooked finally in the burning cauldron of our ow.. read more
It appears that the couple in this offering had a fling that turned out badly. I am getting two versions of the speaker's point of view, however. One seems to indicate a belief that sex without love is ultimately unsatisfying. The other comes across as a negative moral judgment against forbidden love. Not sure which is accurate; I prefer the former.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Sabrina M

4 Months Ago

When I write a piece I let the thoughts flow in any and every direction as they take me and the read.. read more
The star crossed lovers get all the headlines because their love is the most interesting, salacious, scandalous, provoking, and remarkable. As a society we relish the chance to find fault. This poem attaches no blame or criticism to the condition of these lovers, but merely reports their passion against adversity. Well done . I say.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Sabrina M

4 Months Ago

The society at large, especially my society is quite barbaric to such people and like to sit on judg.. read more
Delmar Cooper

4 Months Ago

I was roundly condemned by a female editor for a story I wrote in which a grandfather considered in .. read more
This is a beautiful use of the language, every line twists and turns and is ripe with meaning. A masterpiece. I hope you continue to post here because I would very much like to keep reading your work. This piece seems to touch me personally but I guess that's what good art does.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Sabrina M

4 Months Ago

As I have joined newly I am still forming my opinion about this website. I am on two other poetry we.. read more
Illicit love and the passion and trouble it causes in the aftermath. Passion is fleeting for the most part but the negative effects of such an encounter can linger in the air for much longer. It's a matter of choice in the heat of the moment and dealing with the consequences afterwards. It's an idea that has varying degrees of interpretation, depending on where we reside. It's an interesting theme and one well conveyed with pace and imagery.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sabrina M

4 Months Ago

Orange from Australia. Those who never love never feel the human highs and lows that should be felt .. read more
Orange

4 Months Ago

Sorry no time waste different definitions here, have good day
Sabrina M

4 Months Ago

Thats absolutely not a problem and I am open to comments from you on anything of mine that does matc.. read more

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Sabrina M
Sabrina M

Lahore, Punjab , Pakistan



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Hi, my name is Sabrina Muhammad. I am 24 years old. I am studying English Literature MA in university of Lahore. I am currently practicing poetry for publication abroad. I think I can be better with m.. more..

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