Warmth

Warmth

A Poem by Sacha Davison
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The possibility of your love keeps me warm in the dead of winter.

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My heart pulses, as you fill me with desire;
Inspiring me, my enchanting forest scene;
Comforting me, throughout my darkest hours.

How long must I wait, to feel your warm embrace
And how long, until I may hear your true voice.
Eventually, through endless efforts, I will.

Love so deep, based on such shallow connection,
Is, perhaps, quite a preemptive sentiment.
Silently, I wait for you to share this love.

Beauty, is more than skin-deep and you prove it.
Even though your shell lacks not divinity,
All evidence validates your character.

Until the sun is extinguished, my treasure,
This tortured, young soul will wait for your love to
Ignite the kindling of the bliss that could be;

Fueling the scorching, searing flames of young love,
Until they erupt into a supernova.
Let me show you the warmer side of living.

© 2013 Sacha Davison


Author's Note

Sacha Davison
Not a piece I'm particularily thrilled with, however the content is rather genuine. Comments and criticism is very much welcome!

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I like this except for the last line...the last line should be different...I'll tell you why. You build up with these fantastic adjectives and then..."the warmer side of living" seems pretty plain and comfortable even mundane ...I think you need something more awe inspiring there like, Let me cradle you in the universe of my love or let me lick you with the flames of my desire...something big and bold!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sacha Davison

7 Years Ago

A capital suggestion! I agree that it is a rather subtle and weak line to finish on, but the subtlet.. read more



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Even though you say you are not thrilled with it I think it is very pretty.

Posted 4 Years Ago


I thought this was lovely...and maybe I would change the last word to ME from living.
I enjoyed reading your words...SyberRose

Posted 6 Years Ago


Well written and eloquent. Excellent work!

Posted 7 Years Ago


I like it a lot :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


fine

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sacha, this is a lovely poem with a neo classical feel to it. It is warm and romantic.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I think you put yourself down..This is NOT one of your best but it is still pretty darn good.....It reflects TRUE love

Posted 7 Years Ago


I want to disagree with the review before mine. I think your last line is wonderful. It's subtle and strong, altogether very reassuring. It shows that you are secure and have found your own peace, which gives you something to share with your lover besides bold exaggerated claims. It follows your flame imagery but not in a way that will completely burn an consume love. It also brings a curve to your poetic path, from ignition, to fuel, the searing, to eruption, and then a deep steady warmth. This is a well-written piece.

Did you say you wanted to be a rapper? Do you have any of that work on this website? I'm interested to see what you do with rhythm, you seem to have meter down.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sacha Davison

7 Years Ago

Wow. I couldn't have worded that better myself, you understand this piece almost more than I do. Tha.. read more
Nice work. This peace filled me with quite a lot of emotion or rather spoke to and kindled the emotion already welling up inside of me. I enjoyed it's ability to draw me in.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sacha Davison

7 Years Ago

I'm glad someone can relate, more directly, to this piece. It's a glorious feeling, yet I can't help.. read more
Jeremia

7 Years Ago

Man I know exactly what you mean. And you are welcome.
i enjoyed this write, but i am of the same opinion as fabian here, this last line doesn't do it for me. this is a fairly stellar write(no pun intended) and that last line just does not gel with the rest of the piece....i was expecting something like...falling toward an irresistible force...join with me at event horizon...i don't know...wonderful write, needs a better ending.

Posted 7 Years Ago


quinfinn

7 Years Ago

romance is wonderful but over rated....you must have a sense of humor
quinfinn

7 Years Ago

you are the writer, all the power is yours....enjoy!
Sacha Davison

7 Years Ago

Aha, I feel as though you are attempting to close this conversation, so I bid you farewell! Thank y.. read more

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Added on January 11, 2013
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Sacha Davison
Sacha Davison

NEW BRUNSWICK, Canada



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A collection of content, largely unedited, that I have created over the years. Most pieces currently posted are from my teenage years, but I will be posting more examples of my work, in the near futur.. more..

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