Warmth

Warmth

A Poem by Sacha Davison
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The possibility of your love keeps me warm in the dead of winter.

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My heart pulses, as you fill me with desire;
Inspiring me, my enchanting forest scene;
Comforting me, throughout my darkest hours.

How long must I wait, to feel your warm embrace
And how long, until I may hear your true voice.
Eventually, through endless efforts, I will.

Love so deep, based on such shallow connection,
Is, perhaps, quite a preemptive sentiment.
Silently, I wait for you to share this love.

Beauty, is more than skin-deep and you prove it.
Even though your shell lacks not divinity,
All evidence validates your character.

Until the sun is extinguished, my treasure,
This tortured, young soul will wait for your love to
Ignite the kindling of the bliss that could be;

Fueling the scorching, searing flames of young love,
Until they erupt into a supernova.
Let me show you the warmer side of living.

© 2013 Sacha Davison


Author's Note

Sacha Davison
Not a piece I'm particularily thrilled with, however the content is rather genuine. Comments and criticism is very much welcome!

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I like this except for the last line...the last line should be different...I'll tell you why. You build up with these fantastic adjectives and then..."the warmer side of living" seems pretty plain and comfortable even mundane ...I think you need something more awe inspiring there like, Let me cradle you in the universe of my love or let me lick you with the flames of my desire...something big and bold!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sacha Davison

11 Years Ago

A capital suggestion! I agree that it is a rather subtle and weak line to finish on, but the subtlet.. read more



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Your poem did feel genuine. Love seldom feels just perfect, and it often is predictable at times. A comfortable read at the least.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sacha Davison

11 Years Ago

Thank you, good sir!
As you step tentatively into a jungle, even though you are free to back track to the village, you can feel that this is a journey worth taking so you can at the beginning of a relationship. Go deeper into the unknown and all will be revealed. We have communicated before and this is a brand new path... yes? I actually I like the bathos and sincerity of the last line.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sacha Davison

11 Years Ago

Seriously. You need to stop showing me up by simply reviewing! -.-

Aha, all jokes aside.. read more
Richard Man

11 Years Ago

oops...
In the second to the last and the last stanzas you've gone a bit overboard with the "young" talk..."young soul" then right after we get "young love"...I wonder if a poet as talented as yourself might find some other way to express one or both of these sentiments ;-) Otherwise, it's a nice piece. Thanks for sharing it and being so open to constructive criticism. That is, after all, why we are all here.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sacha Davison

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your observations and praise! I agree, my diction was lacking, I usually mak.. read more
Sacha Davison

11 Years Ago

Come to think, most of those words that I constantly repeat have a broad spectrum of synonyms that a.. read more
KAOlmsted

11 Years Ago

My pleasure...and by all means, explore those alternatives!
This is pretty deep for someone so young, the thrill and anticipation of love is always provocative and fodder for some good poetry.

'Until they erupt into a supernova' :-) Go you.

Enjoyable read.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sacha Davison

11 Years Ago

You mean to tell me I am able to cease regarding such things through my tinted, smudged window pane?.. read more
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

LOL you're too cute. Enjoy your coffee, and life. ;-)
Sacha Davison

11 Years Ago

Aha, why thank you! I will certainly enjoy these things, more so the former ;p
Not your best, I'll admit, but it's still pretty good. This right here though, it shines.

"Fueling the scorching, searing flames of young love,
Until they erupt into a supernova.
Let me show you the warmer side of living." Love that.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sacha Davison

11 Years Ago

Thank you for your honesty, as well as your praise! This is certainly a lower-caste demonstration of.. read more
That_Girl

11 Years Ago

I know what you mean. Some things are difficult to express and via our impatience, we never do it ju.. read more
Sacha Davison

11 Years Ago

Thank you, again! (:
I like this except for the last line...the last line should be different...I'll tell you why. You build up with these fantastic adjectives and then..."the warmer side of living" seems pretty plain and comfortable even mundane ...I think you need something more awe inspiring there like, Let me cradle you in the universe of my love or let me lick you with the flames of my desire...something big and bold!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sacha Davison

11 Years Ago

A capital suggestion! I agree that it is a rather subtle and weak line to finish on, but the subtlet.. read more
A lovely poem of love and redemption in the passage of time. Bravo!

Posted 11 Years Ago


This piece reminds me of the movie Hanna. Not sure if you've seen it but yeah I perceived it in such a way that a young girl is looking for acceptance in a world where she's all alone. She's been an orphan in the cold, and she dreams of sunny days.. better days.
"Fueling the scorching, searing flames of young love,
Until they erupt into a supernova.
Let me show you the warmer side of living." very good imagery, and flow the entire piece is well written for a 17 year old you're on your way to becoming a fine writer sir.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sacha Davison

11 Years Ago

Haven't seen the film, no, however I'll be sure to check it out! I appreciate the compliment and enc.. read more

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Added on January 11, 2013
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