Make Way!

Make Way!

A Poem by Susan S.

When Fall hits the pavement--and running,
We're in for an autumn quite stunning.
The deciduous trees
Will bring us to our knees,
Then I pick up my piece and go gunning!

© 2008 Susan S.


Author's Note

Susan S.
I dithered a long time between line 5 and "While the men will enjoy their fall gunning!" and I finally went for the radical. I call myself a raving pacifist and would never "go gunning".

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Like your little ditty. Though i would change lines 4 and 5. to make it go faster.
When Fall hits the pavement--and running,
We're in for an autumn quite stunning.
The deciduous trees.
Will bend our knees.,
But I'll pick up my piece and go gunning!

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Halloween and hunting season are quite the match. As long as the hunters aren't out with the treat-or-treaters, the kids are safe. Good one! Sharon

Posted 15 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Oh, I like short poems! This is definitely a favourite.

Posted 15 Years Ago



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Susan S.
Susan S.

Tacoma, WA



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As with most writers, I've written since I could put crayon to paper. It is the one thing I would turn down sex to do. The only thing I do more, is read. ...and breathe. My genre is mainly english.. more..

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