PAINFUL LOVE - II

 

girl

 

I

O Dear! O Dear!

It's give me dead tear.

Every word, which I exhibit is too much less

For myself, I am a major distress

My face is not reduce my sorrow

My smile comes like an arrow

Sad today, there's no happy tomorrow

I can see dead way clear.

 

II

O God! O God!

Why I face the sun; Lord?

I am totally wreck

My strength is not to take too rack

God; Hell's fire is much accessible

People's joy is not audible

Dead is fare irrevocable

When I run after to the old.

 

III

O God! O God!

See this forcible odd.

I have not patient to take this grief

But; God; I have incredible belief

I reject your life without sweetheart

PAINFUL LOVE give hurt

Death with all my heart

Let my book fold.

Reviews

[Julie Spade]

Painful Love, is a great written piece that was created from deep within you, which I greatly admire about you ! The flow is well developed and eases with the concept. The meaning within this poem makes me and the others to think hard and long, which is the goal of a poet ....to drill your words into our brains to think later on! Thank You for sharing !

[Saddam]

Well said dear.....thank you for giving it you precious time and your words.

[MomzillaNC]

Deep pain and meaning… .

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend....

[MomzillaNC]

YVW :D

[hardeep sabharwal]

An emotional and deep write, nice read

[Saddam]

Glad to know that. Thank you so much...

[anne]

O God! O God!
Why I face the sun; Lord?
I am totally wreck
My strength is not to take too rack
God; Hell's fire is much accessible
People's joy is not audible
Dead is fare irrevocable
When I run after to the old...very true dear..great job..

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend. Glad you like it.

[Lyndy]

I like this poem, it's quite meaningful and I like the way it was composed. The whole piece of work is well written! :D

[Saddam]

Thank you so much my sweet and dear friend.

[nazia]

A piece right from your heart that strikes the reader right from the first line. Great work :)

[Saddam]

Thanks a lot dear, It is those emotions of my early days when I fall in my first.........

[Deepika]

A deep and emotional write! Great flow saddam :)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear.

[Jeyanthi]

The girl's confession is really touching.

But i don't want her to jump from the window. :P

[Saddam]

I also think so. Thank you so much dear friend.

[stars are far]

that was very heartfelt, and many can relate to it.i loved how you wrote this,
keep it up :)

[Saddam]

Thank you dear.

[Ana B.]

A very beautiful and original piece my dear. Excellent work :)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend.

[Elisa]

It's so tragic that all this built up pain is soon sequestered into resignation. You are so right. Love can hurt so badly.

[Saddam]

Thanks a lot dear, it means tons for me.