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Forever is too long

Forever is too long

A Poem by Maan

A slave calling his master for a competition.

Forever is too long,
give me few moments
and give me back
all the dark side of me,
and see

God is too strong,
give me the demon,
your minor slave,
my next competitor,
and come

I’m right and wrong,
I’m light and dark,
I’m strong and powerful,
I’m a story of vengeance,
so enjoy

don’t be afraid of me
I’m just a scream
you’ll bear and I’ll go
I hope you’ll bear
so find out

I’m honest and just
black and white
you’re finest
every color except
black and white

give me few moments
and give me the freedom,
free me and see
I’m your next competitor
find out

stop panting
don’t wait 'cause
forever is too long

© 2012 Maan

Author's Note

Sometimes masters doesn't deserve to rule, and sometimes slaves are worthy to be a king. The rank of the person does not matter, the character does, the faith and believe does. I see many examples around myself, I was just thinking how must it feels to be a slave and live. . this is the result of my thoughts.. Feel free to review. .

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Very well written and I also agree that a rank doesn't matters, but his character does.

Posted 4 Years Ago

such a thought provoking piece of work !!!!!! very well written !!!
thanks for sharing !!!!
100% ratings from me

Posted 5 Years Ago

This piece was beautifully crafted. Amazing thought and a beautiful reverie :)

Posted 5 Years Ago

It was a pleasure to read and contemplate this poem Maan... The title is very thought provoking too... All Good Things, N

Posted 7 Years Ago

This really is an amazing and powerful write.. I loved the poem and the authors's note only made me sigh further.. Excellent write..x

Posted 8 Years Ago

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Poignant write indeed!!! with such deep meaning specially the author's note...

Posted 8 Years Ago

I really like this. Your comments above are very profound..and are reflected in this Piece. Keep Writing. Try a Short Story.. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago

Poignant write the content of the caharacter paramount and often they are not found in the popular.

Posted 8 Years Ago

Your poem is an interesting exercise in contrasts. Good and evil, light and dark. These kinds of writings cause the reader to think and ponder on the philosophies of man. It highlights the dilemma that man's civilization finds itself trapped in. How do we know what is right or wrong, good or evil? Like reviewer Mayowa explains, God is real and he is the one who determines those boundaries.

Posted 8 Years Ago

My emotion, when some writes or says something against God is always fear. Fear for the person who wrote or said it. Now that i read your poem the same feeling is awakened. Even though some people do not believe in God, am sorry to tell those ones that His existence does not depend on their believe or even their breathe.
You need to know this that God is real, more real than the lines on your palm. He loves you dearly and really wants to meet you. Try talking to him in the most sincere and humble manner, He is not deaf, He is God (The self existing one)

Posted 8 Years Ago

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Added on October 6, 2012
Last Updated on October 6, 2012
Tags: for, ever, forever, dark, evil, is, too, long



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