Apathetic

Bleeding hearts drop unceremoniously to the floor

Veins pumped full of deleterious venom

We cannot stand to take it anymore

But our eyes are locked upon grotesque beauty

 

 

Examples of bones and skin are on display

Small gasps of wistful breath, bodies declining

Stilts strapped to their attenuated limbs

Grasping in the dark, they can't seem to find me

 

I sit in a lonesome corner watching and waiting

Unable to sustain the burdens of our generation

But they are there as well, taunting and baiting

Their insidious promises dripping with poison

 

Victims of their assualts are of an abundant measure

To end the pain is a hopeless endeavour

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

And no, I don't care if it doesn't follow any format rules.

Reviews

[chandlerl]

The f**k if i care about format...esspecially if this is the out come.
I enjoyed it, thank you.=)

[James William Dyer]

formatting rules can suck off

[SamanthaMarie]

Damn straight.

[James William Dyer]

I liked it a lot. Very original. First line second stanza, I thought sounded better as "examples of bone and skin on display", but that's just me. I think maybe including one mopre line that pulls it all together would bring the poem out of riddle status. I think it is about giving up, all the horrors of human frailty around you and the inability to stop or effect it in the manner you want leads to apathy??????

[SamanthaMarie]

Oh you're good. Figured out my riddle...damn you. Now I just feel like a defeated arch enemy. You may be right about removing the plural s from bone. Actually I like that better as well.. So I'll change it, thank you .

[MAC]

there are format rules?? oh....that is why people trash my poetry LOL

i like this poem, it has some edge to it and it is an intelligent write.

makes me think of being out of place at a party

[Mucha]

I love the line, "But our eyes are locked upon their grotesque beauty"
It shows how there is a part in all of us that love to see gore and dirt. Not many people will admit it. Wonderful poem as always :)

[SamanthaMarie]

Thanks, Mucha!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is pain suspended in time...
You have written an intense piece in such a depleting way, it bleeds out the poison. The free form of your writing is well expressed. Amazing work!

[SamanthaMarie]

Thank you so much, Robbie! What a wonderful compliment :D

[Leigh]

I sit in a lonesome corner, is just magic, please get your head out of your hands :-)

Gosh there is an intensity to this one, its really getting into me.

Keep it up.....please

[SamanthaMarie]

:D Thank you, Leigh. Hopefully it's getting into you in a good way...

[Leigh]

Yes :D

[unshakenScene]

this is good :) i liked reading this one

[SamanthaMarie]

I'm so glad :D

[Somebrownnerd]

Our generations view of aesthetics is very grotesque, its all about that "fake plastic love". Great write. Keep doing what your doing!

[SamanthaMarie]

I swear that I sometimes stand alone on points like this, but of course I expected more from my fellow writers. And I will!

[kublakhan27]

Brilliant...I can say nothing more :)

[SamanthaMarie]

Thank you! Always an awesome compliment ;)

[kublakhan27]

You're very welcome ;)