Oh Sweet Maiden

Oh Sweet Maiden

A Poem by PoeticVandal

In a dark and lonely night,
On a dank and dirty floor,
A fair maiden as pale as light,
In a placid slumber she resides,
Neither the twigs that grace her hair,
Nor the soil that stain her amber,
Hinders the magnificence her beauty shines.
And I being forever a gentleman,
Call her out to improve her den.
But her eyes flutter not,
Nor does her calm face show crease.
I wander closer to try once more,
But in a trance I cannot move.
For I'm captivated by the fair maiden,
And the sweet slumber where she now resides.
I feel no urge to quicken her awakening,
But soon I break free of these restraints,
And attempt to shake her from slumber,
But my hands soon realise,
She is but as cold as ice,
And as I lift her hand to check a pulse,
I find none, nor the sound of breath.
It is then with a tingling chill I realise,
That I cannot wake her,
From the sweet slumber where she now resides......

© 2014 PoeticVandal

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One thing to say: Beautifully great! You are very talented!

Posted 9 Years Ago

cleverly written and beautifully worded, this write weaves a tragedy of discovery. upon discovering her condition he discovers his own....in so many words, heartbreaking.

Posted 9 Years Ago

This was nice but it left me with questions. Was this woman someone he just happened upon or was this a love he has now lost? Does he feel sadness at his discovery?

Posted 9 Years Ago


9 Years Ago

Just a women he happened upon.

9 Years Ago

No sadness. Just shock

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3 Reviews
Added on March 4, 2013
Last Updated on January 16, 2014
Tags: maiden, beauty, slumber, sleep, dark, narration



Dubai, Karama, United Arab Emirates

I began writing almost 5 years ago, but not as much as i have in the past year or so.. Though I may have years behind me, I am but a hatch-ling in the world of writing...... That being said, please r.. more..


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