Left here to Die.

Left here to Die.

A Poem by Sanjh
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A sad romantic song on betrayal

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The pain in my heart,
Was not in my destiny...
The tears in my eyes,
Were not meant for me...
This life of sadness,
Is not what i asked for....
Yeah you sold out your heart,
And it was never me...

 

I took the pain of your share,
and every last one of your tears...
I took the darkness away,
But it's all my cries that now I hear...
And you were never mine,
But yet you always kept on lying...
Yeah this pain was meant for you,
And now you've left me here for dying...
And now you've left me here for dying...

 

This fear in my soul,
I never felt it before...
Always thinking of you,
Is burning me more...
There's storm in my head,
n all the pain in the store...
It cries out your name ,
But there are so many doors...

 

I gave you that smile on your face,
And took your pain with all the grace...
And I let you fly like a kite,
And you left me in this place...
But then you went away too far,
N I was waiting for all the night...
I kept on trying to bring you back,
With all the heart n all my might...
I kept on praying to the divine,
Hoping all the wrongs would change to right...
And you were never ever mine,
But yet you always kept on lying...
Yeah this pain was meant for you,
And now you've left me here for dying...
And now you've left me here for dying...

© 2014 Sanjh


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Sanjh
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Sometimes selfless love is not returned as selflessly as it deserves to be. And that brings on pain and a lasting sadness. You have done wonders with the expression of that pain here Sanjh. Life is not fair but it is all we have. Thanks for sharing your feelings.

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Divya...:)
DIVYA

7 Years Ago

My pleasure Sanjh. Let's keep writing and sharing. :)



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I think a good song is something that a lot of people can relate to, and I can definitely understand the narrator's feelings in this - I can relate to it so much

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reading, I'm glad you liked it...:)
you must be a songwriter Sanjh, each time i read your work you have all the elements for music, this is sad and melancholy you must have suffered a similar fate at some time but then that's the writers main tool, to suffer is to write, write on Sanjh :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

7 Years Ago

I try writing songs at times sir, thanks for appreciating. And we are all here giving a glimpse of o.. read more
This is really sad and has deep meanings. It really gives out the sad and painful aura,

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

7 Years Ago

you are right again, hope you liked it...:)
Shitsune Hyuuga

7 Years Ago

I love your works seriously :) I'd surely read all of your work when am not o busy with things :)
Sanjh

7 Years Ago

Sure, you are welcome to read, review and suggest any ideas for improving the note anytime...:)
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Deep and sad. I really liked it. It's very good.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reviewing it again Dale. I'm glad you liked it so much. Thanks...:)
Confuser

7 Years Ago

Enjoyed it Sanjay. Dale...........................................................................
Confuser

7 Years Ago

Looking again over your songs. This quite beautiful too. DO NOT READ LYRICS AEROSMITH, CRYIN...I r.. read more
beautifully expressed! and with putting emotion to pen its easy to let the pen lead and miss grammatical errors however whats important is that you were able to get all the emotion out and expressed. keep writing

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

7 Years Ago

I'm glad you liked it, thank you...:)
This a deep piece, sometimes I had to re-read to try and grasp your meaning, personally I agree about the short-hand writing but in this world of writing you can't please everyone brother, keep it up

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

7 Years Ago

Yeah it's true, we can't please everyone. We can just try our best...

Thanks for apprec.. read more
A.D Edwards

7 Years Ago

My pleasure
Great lyric… full of passion and loss and feelings of betrayal.

NOTES: I think you've over used the word "and" in this piece. In most cases, it looks superfluous to the lines and actually hinders the meter. I know this doesn't have a strictly defined meter, nor do I think it needs it. But, a balanced meter always helps the flow of a lyric; I think the excessive use of "and" cripples that balance and also gives each otherwise unique line a feeling of over repetitiveness.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

7 Years Ago

Glad that you liked it and thank you for the advice. It's very helpful...:)
MomzillaNC

7 Years Ago

I'm glad it was helpful.
Well well well.. stop using N instead of and. You aint short messaging here.dont use short hand
I am not a great fan of pessimistic poems..but the way you wrote this piece it is totally from heart. Thats a good thing
keep writing

Sophy


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

7 Years Ago

thanks for the advice, really helpful...:)
In simple language, you have said genuine story of a broken heart. The pain, the cries, chaos on your mind and hope in spite of betrayal, everything is narrated beautifully with sadness.
I liked it a lot. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

7 Years Ago

I am glad you liked it, thank you...:)
The most geniune feelings expressed in a lively manner. There so many instances that show the real pangs of hreatfelt velediction. The poem is simply express the deep discontentment of lover's faithless who leaves her beloved crying ....I really enjoy the content and simple diction....
Keep writing...
Have a nice time!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much...:)
M.A.Rathore

7 Years Ago

Welcome always...

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