Moonlight...

Moonlight...

A Poem by Sanjh
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A feeling long suppressed...

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Sitting at the window,
I saw the full moon tonight.
It felt beautiful than ever,
Showering bright white light...

There was some sadness in it,
It felt like the moon is crying.
I think the moon was talking to me,
But why was he shying...?

The moonlight touched my face,
Reminding me of someone very special.
A tear rolled out of my eyes,
And head went to nestle...

All the emotions suppressed,
Came out through my eyes.
Just looking at the moon,
My tears went on rise...

Maybe she too was looking at the moon,
Maybe she was also crying.
My heart was pounding so fast,
I felt like I'm dying...

All the times when we were together,
Kept on flashing in my mind.
My heart filled with her love,
And now it was not confined...

The moonlight told me,
How much she misses me.
There are tears in her eyes,
And she is making this plea...

"Please come back to me,
Let's try to work things out..."
My mind was confused,
But the heart wanted to shout...

I could see her face on the moon,
She was in front of my sight.
The moon was just a messenger,
And message, was the moonlight...

© 2014 Sanjh


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Author's Note

Sanjh
Got the idea for this poem while returning late at night from work. Hope you'd enjoy...thank you...:)

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Well written and delivered!
I have felt this feeling before as if my special someone and I were longing
for one another under the same moon at the same time:(
I really enjoyed this piece and pray that you and yours work things out!
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much James. :)



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i really enjoyed this poem keep up the good work this poem had a wonderfrul flow to it keep writing

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much, I'll try my best...:)
That moon is a comfort for all. Lovely write.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

I'm glad you liked it Pryde, thank you...:)
Do not dare change anything. It's perfect just the way it is.

I love you. Love you for this amazing piece of poetry,

As I was reading this, the imagery just sped through my head, and it's romanticism was beautifully portrayed.

I love that you put the moon in this. It makes the romance even more powerful.

It's a Juliet and Romeo thing. You should be proud. x

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Wow, thank you so much Jessica. I'm happy you liked it so much. these sure are big words of apprecia.. read more
This poem is quite emotional.. The feelings, they are quite palpable.. The rhymes fit in well in most places.. A couple of suggestions .

"Reminding me of someone very special.
And head went to nestle... "

"Maybe she was also crying.
I felt like I'm dying... "

- here the rhymes seem forced.. (This is just my opinion.. :P )

A really good write. :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you for the suggestions, I'll try my best to improve it...:)
This is beautiful, so sweet ...romantic
you captured the moment beautifully.
Well done! I truly like this. i enjoyed it a lot... I'm impress! :D

Note:
Maybe she too was looking at the moon,
Maybe she was also crying.
My heart was pounding so fast,
I felt like I'm dying...

^ "I felt like I was dying "past tense"
"I feel like I'm dying" Present tense"

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you for appreciating Suk, and also for the correction...:)
The Black Warrior

6 Years Ago

You are very welcome... I enjoyed reading your piece!
lovely poem Sanjh, i like the use of the moon as your messenger of love, the ending is superb, a great idea :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you for appreciating Richard...:)
just beautiful. I'd give you 99 out of 100 for this one. there's room for improvement

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much Tara, I'll try my best to improve it...:)
Heartfelt piece, oh how I wish she would come back. Lovely. Imagery of the moon delightful. thank you.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you for the lovely comment but so sad your wish cannot be true...:p
I'm glad you liked i.. read more
Confuser

6 Years Ago

Y/W..............................................................
The moon is and has always been a mystery object at the sky. I often look at the moon and have also made some poems about her. But I have never seen the moon as you describe in your poem, it's refreshing and new for me. But I have to agree, moonlight can be very romantic. :)
Rudi

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the kind words Rudi...:)
Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere

6 Years Ago

My pleasure. I love poems about the moon. :)
Rudi
i enjoyed it. heart-touching poem.
words are used pretty well..rythme is perfect.
i loved it. thanx for sharing.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you for reading Ayesha...:)

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