Moonlight...

Moonlight...

A Poem by Sanjh
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A feeling long suppressed...

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Sitting at the window,
I saw the full moon tonight.
It felt beautiful than ever,
Showering bright white light...

There was some sadness in it,
It felt like the moon is crying.
I think the moon was talking to me,
But why was he shying...?

The moonlight touched my face,
Reminding me of someone very special.
A tear rolled out of my eyes,
And head went to nestle...

All the emotions suppressed,
Came out through my eyes.
Just looking at the moon,
My tears went on rise...

Maybe she too was looking at the moon,
Maybe she was also crying.
My heart was pounding so fast,
I felt like I'm dying...

All the times when we were together,
Kept on flashing in my mind.
My heart filled with her love,
And now it was not confined...

The moonlight told me,
How much she misses me.
There are tears in her eyes,
And she is making this plea...

"Please come back to me,
Let's try to work things out..."
My mind was confused,
But the heart wanted to shout...

I could see her face on the moon,
She was in front of my sight.
The moon was just a messenger,
And message, was the moonlight...

© 2014 Sanjh


Author's Note

Sanjh
Got the idea for this poem while returning late at night from work. Hope you'd enjoy...thank you...:)

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Well written and delivered!
I have felt this feeling before as if my special someone and I were longing
for one another under the same moon at the same time:(
I really enjoyed this piece and pray that you and yours work things out!
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much James. :)



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I like the imagery and flow emanating from this piece... your rhyming, too is in place and adds to the beauty.. I am not a fan of rhyme and meter but doesn't mean I should not appreciate good poetry..

Good write, Sanjh.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for appreciating...:)
"I could see her face on the moon,
She was in front of my sight.
The moon was just a messenger,
And message, was the moonlight...
I like the memories and the need to find a place lost. The moonlight can make us wish for things lost. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

I'm glad you liked it Coyote, thank you...:)
Coyote Poetry

6 Years Ago

You are welcome.
I love the simplicity and the tenderness which flows through your poems..subtle yet beautiful! I enjoyed it! :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much Arshia...:)
Moon and love, both are fascinating themes for poetry, a nice read here, I liked your expression,
thankyou :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you...:)
Moonlight always an amusing factor of nature. Your words brought it to life, personified it. Thanks for sharing :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you for reading Gurleen...:)
wow, i loved the last 2 lines, they are wonderful and very expressive, you did a great work here..well done

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much...:)
A wonderful form of Pathetic Falacy! And considering my name means the moonlight, I loved the ode dedicated to the message :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much Chandni (moonlight)...I'm glad you liked it...:)
It felt more beautiful than ever, ... you can correct that.
It felt like the moon was (not is) crying. , as you have all the other lines in past tense
I felt like I was (not I'm) dying...
It was beautiful. I can see that you have a sadness in your life because of the lady who isn't with you now but used to be. :) You should talk to her, I suggest, young man. You feelings are as evident as ever, now!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thanks for the suggestions Beautiful Eyes...:)
I think we've all looked up at the moon, when far from those we love, and wondered if they were looking up at it too. I like the moonlight messenger theme.

NOTES: "It felt beautiful [as] ever," or "It felt [more] beautiful than ever,"
Maybe: "My tears are on the rise…"



Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the suggestions. I'll update it...:)
MomzillaNC

6 Years Ago

You're welcome. Glad to help.
Its beautifully written. You expressed your emotions greatly.
Its tells how there's a connection between two people even if they are far away.
It tells a sad but beautiful story. And the use of moonlight as a messenger is a great idea :) This is heart touching. I could feel every single emotion in there.
Great job again!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the kind words...:)

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