I Promise...

I Promise...

A Poem by Sanjh
"

A promise to keep.

"
I'll be here,
I promised...

When you left me,
on this lonely path.
Left with just darkness,
And love's deadly wraith...

I tried to turn around and return,
from where I once started.
Kept running in the dark,
everyone thought I'm retarded...

I'll be here,
I promised...

I tried to free myself,
from each and every thought of you.
But the more I thought,
the deeper my love grew...

I cried, I shouted,
Thinking you might hear.
But no one ever heard me,
I lived in shadows of my tears...

I'm still here,
as I promised...

I'm still waiting for you,
from where you left long ago...
But you might not recognize me,
for who am i now? Even I don't know...

But I'm still here,
everyday my love still grows.
You are far away from me,
And I just want you to know:

I'll always be here,
I promise once more...

© 2014 Sanjh


Author's Note

Sanjh
Help me improve it...thank you...:)

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I don't think it needs anymore improvement ..it's already so amazing that it made me teary nd after every stanza when u said " i will be here ,i promised " .. it just made me stop and stare for few minutes ... very beautifull , totally a piece of brilliance.. :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it and it touched you...:)
blackfairy3

6 Years Ago

Your welcome :)



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It's complete by my opinion... doesn't need to be improved... very well done

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

5 Years Ago

Thanks Daisy...:)
Wow, this is really amazing, and really struck a chord within me. Really great piece of writing, thank you so much for sharing!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you Natalie...:)
Truly beautiful :) no improvement at all

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much Kristen...:)
its filled with true emotions..beautiful work..:)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thanks Shivedita, I'm glad you liked it...:)
You have such a beautiful way with words

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much...:)
Indeed to wait for your loved one, to wait to feel loved is a really painful feeling. You never know, if he will return or does he even love you but you still wanna be there for him, by his side, waiting to return his love. Yes, as if keeping a said or unsaid promise. Very nicely depicted and emotional piece.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

You're right Penny, we never know that the person we are waiting for will ever return or is he/she e.. read more
Penny

6 Years Ago

It Has been my pleasure..
I don't see a reason to improve this. The poem is really well written. You did really well.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much Lexy...:)
I don't think it needs anymore improvement ..it's already so amazing that it made me teary nd after every stanza when u said " i will be here ,i promised " .. it just made me stop and stare for few minutes ... very beautifull , totally a piece of brilliance.. :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it and it touched you...:)
blackfairy3

6 Years Ago

Your welcome :)
No need to improve...its amazing

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

Thank you Misha, I'm glad you liked it...:)
it reminds me of the song ''The man who can't be moved'' by The Script. I loved your poem, it has a big note of love but most of all - devotion

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sanjh

6 Years Ago

I just read the lyrics of the song ''The man who can't be moved'', it's beautiful and very close to .. read more
Ana B.

6 Years Ago

you're welcome :)

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Sanjh
Sanjh

New Delhi, India



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