Under The Rose Trellis

Under The Rose Trellis

A Poem by Sunflower/Sara Kendrick
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Choka, the longest of Japanese Haiku type poem...

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                             Running Pale Pink Rose

                       On the trellis grows_soft scent

                             Wafts on morning air

                   

                               Under rose trellis

                       You steal a kiss__Oh! Blissful

                            Lips that taste of rose

 

© 2011 Sunflower/Sara Kendrick


Author's Note

Sunflower/Sara Kendrick
Choka, written in response to competition that said leave me breathless..

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There is something special about a rose, a kiss, and a poem...
They are all rather "minuscule" in the grand scheme of things. Yet, they all have the power to change this world into a better place...
Much like you Sara as an author... Making the world a better place.
Lovely!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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That was so sweet and the thought could be TASTED ON THE END OF MY TONGUE

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Posted 10 Years Ago


Nice! I love the vivid picture you paint with your well chosen words.

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Posted 10 Years Ago


This was very lovely.
The ending was so unique and very amazing!

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Posted 10 Years Ago


So much meant in so few words .. beautiful, serene, charming, memorable.

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Posted 10 Years Ago


pretty and pink... so gentle and simple. inspired. :)

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Posted 10 Years Ago


You know I haven't written much in the form of Haiku or Senryu, but I enjoy the power that when written well they posses in such little diction. You have wrote a great verse full of passion and awe in the sight of love.

Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy


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Posted 10 Years Ago


Such a mesmerizing use of vocab, it doesn't fail to create a sensation. Wow, well done!

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Posted 10 Years Ago


"The miniscule is very important.." indeed
This poem shows the truth in your statement.
A joy of life compacted..but highly visual
in six short lines..
enjoyed

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Posted 10 Years Ago


This does sound very blissful and romantic. I give it an 100. I really enjoyed this beautiful poem!

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Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful write. Just so picturesque. Nature is a beautiful topic and it also makes poetry beautiful.

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Posted 10 Years Ago


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Added on May 12, 2010
Last Updated on April 19, 2011
Tags: Choka, love, nature, take your breath away
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