7 til 7

7 til 7

A Poem by Sara
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aka 'the détente'

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7 til 7

 

translucent morning eternity

warmed by the steam from my coffee cup

no deception left in lazy smiles and bunny slippers

where else can peace be found

except in pancakes and birdsong?

© 2010 Sara


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oh, absolutely indeed. this is transcendent - i think we are at our best in early morning, when possibility exists and when the veil that falls upon us all, all day long, rips a bit and lets us see a little past it. i love that the sentiment of peace and rest translates into a very brief poem -- that does an additional symbolic justice to the simplicity of the moment and the fine details of the peaceful feelings it suggests.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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I’m not really a morning person but from the way you described it here, you make it seem like waking up early is actually something dreamy. You dramatize something ordinary into something quite exquisite. Short but interesting.

Keep Writing. ^___^

Posted 13 Years Ago


Absolutely beautiful and tranquil. I love your gift of description. Some of the most mundane things like lazy smiles and bunny slippers can become such an important vivid part of the speaker's life if you just describe it as devoid of deception. Gorgeously written, very beautiful and ever so peaceful. I love your writing and your choice of words. Well done!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Is this 7pm - 7am or 7am - 7pm? I think it should be the first. It is so true and rather flimsy. As though I am enjoying a cup of coffee in a very lazy state, I guess this is your purpose?

Posted 13 Years Ago


you have a way, a certain way, that is sweet, very sweet

Posted 14 Years Ago


Makes me smile thinking about this poem. It's so light and airy. Thanks for a slice of peace.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I love the title to this piece
Very suggestive of having gone full circle with a days events and the aftermath!
What does an aftermath bring, for they are always clever? Always a reliance on home comforts!
Awesome work!
xx

Posted 14 Years Ago


reminds me of some mornings

and very many stoned evenings

Posted 14 Years Ago


Simply sweet

Posted 14 Years Ago


"Pancakes and birdsong!" Brilliant! So simple. So simple but powerful! I loved this. Definitely one of my favorites of yours.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Very nice, I love this , its simple but very well describe what we need in the mornings :) , this will go to my favorites

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Sara
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Dallas, TX



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