Flying

Flying

A Poem by Sara
"

i'm like a bird, i wanna fly away

"

Flying

 

my pulse mimics the flapping of wings

the whoosh

the wind

of summer days

is under my weak limbs

i rise

heaven is below me

the human brain residing

enfolded and wet

is vaporized

 

i am finally, finally free

© 2010 Sara


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A very nice account of feeling the weight lifted and feeling liberated, It is evokative and very poignant in its brevity and eloquance. 90

Posted 8 Years Ago


A little heavy for me to fly through,The soul hitching a ride on my body like free
wi-fi
no wires,look mom no hands!
"she wrote breathe with your soul",She wrote forget me when I am gone.She said thank you in advance.Thank you for putting your soul on the page.You would of enjoyed Courtney ( From my poem "soul")
Smile cleef



Posted 8 Years Ago


This is a breath of a poem... I tried it, but gravity pulled me down.
Beautiful writing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Very beautiful. Flying is the greatest form of freedom, to soar unrestricted and feel the wide open spaces around you. Absolutely beautiful. I particularly like the line "heaven is below me" it doesn't give off the prideful characteristics of "heaven is beneath me" and instead gives off this feeling that the narrator is flying in a state of bliss that is higher than what one could find in heaven, if it exists. Well done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I get the feeling of flying here! Almost like a swing, really high!!! Cool write, It captures a great feeling, and makes me want to find a park!!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Great wisdom!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Beutiful, I can see it now.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Scratch out the last line and you've got an awesome poem (in my opinion).

The reason being, the feeling of escape and freedom is indirectly implied in your previous stanza.

Keep it up ;)

Posted 10 Years Ago


wow! i love how meaningful it is and how much depth it has! it feels so real and alive.

Posted 10 Years Ago


really simple, but when you read it you feel its depth.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Sara
Sara

Dallas, TX



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