Relentless Monster

Relentless Monster

A Poem by Smwtdmgd

Time as a monster
Keeps tick tick ticking over.
Sometimes behind me,
Most of the times ahead of me,
But when its right beside me,
I get really scared.
Wish I could be spared,
But it cares for no one
And keeps on coming and coming and coming...

© 2018 Smwtdmgd


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Being a morbid individual, I was initially drawn to this poem by the title. I was immediately drawn in by the first line. Since I am one who tends to write Highlander fanfiction, the concepts of past, present, and future are constant in my thoughts for my own writing. Being mortal ourselves, though, the thought of passing time can be scary for any of us and it is truly one from which none of us can "be spared."

My only thought regarding difficulty of reading the poem relates to the tense of the monster. Is it coming for the reader (approaching) or is it ahead of the reader (leaving). Is it going instead of coming, perhaps?

Overall, I enjoyed this short poem. Thank you for writing it.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Smwtdmgd

9 Months Ago

well thank you for your kind words...I too consider myself as a morbid and really weird kind of pers.. read more



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Being a morbid individual, I was initially drawn to this poem by the title. I was immediately drawn in by the first line. Since I am one who tends to write Highlander fanfiction, the concepts of past, present, and future are constant in my thoughts for my own writing. Being mortal ourselves, though, the thought of passing time can be scary for any of us and it is truly one from which none of us can "be spared."

My only thought regarding difficulty of reading the poem relates to the tense of the monster. Is it coming for the reader (approaching) or is it ahead of the reader (leaving). Is it going instead of coming, perhaps?

Overall, I enjoyed this short poem. Thank you for writing it.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Smwtdmgd

9 Months Ago

well thank you for your kind words...I too consider myself as a morbid and really weird kind of pers.. read more
I really like your personification of time’s relentless motion:)

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Smwtdmgd

10 Months Ago

thank you very much...
I couldn't agree more about time being that kind of monster. Very original poem!!!!

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Smwtdmgd

10 Months Ago

yeah...i messed up so many times so it just came into my head...thanks...

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Smwtdmgd
Smwtdmgd

Kathmandu, Nepal



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don't know what I am or what I was...still trying to figure it out...lot goes on my mind...non-stop! from a small country Nepal living in Kathmandu.love to smoke a lot of weed! love the loneliness but.. more..

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