Relentless Monster

Time as a monster
Keeps tick tick ticking over.
Sometimes behind me,
Most of the times ahead of me,
But when its right beside me,
I get really scared.
Wish I could be spared,
But it cares for no one
And keeps on coming and coming and coming...

Reviews

[4000Years]

Being a morbid individual, I was initially drawn to this poem by the title. I was immediately drawn in by the first line. Since I am one who tends to write Highlander fanfiction, the concepts of past, present, and future are constant in my thoughts for my own writing. Being mortal ourselves, though, the thought of passing time can be scary for any of us and it is truly one from which none of us can "be spared."

My only thought regarding difficulty of reading the poem relates to the tense of the monster. Is it coming for the reader (approaching) or is it ahead of the reader (leaving). Is it going instead of coming, perhaps?

Overall, I enjoyed this short poem. Thank you for writing it.

[Smwtdmgd]

well thank you for your kind words...I too consider myself as a morbid and really weird kind of person..and I'm really glad that you asked about my regards on this poem or how I came to write it...
Well for the readers it can be bent on any tense...I think that's beauty of most of the poems...but when I was writing it I thought of my pasts so my actual concept about on it is that time has not and will not wait for anyone and will keep on ticking no matter how scared or anxious we are.
check out my other poems too... I'm a bit new so maybe I maybe not that good..hope you like my other writings too...Thanks..!!!

[Melli]

I really like your personification of time’s relentless motion:)

[Smwtdmgd]

thank you very much...

[Christy the Poetic Hear..]

I couldn't agree more about time being that kind of monster. Very original poem!!!!

[Smwtdmgd]

yeah...i messed up so many times so it just came into my head...thanks...