I spin me right round baby, right round

It's an art form really....



The way I can manufacture
the insanity
that is housed in my brain
and trickles

d
   o
     w
        n

to my chest.


Making my heart beat
faster

my breath catch
quicker

and

flames begin to appear
around the perfect halo
I have also created

just for you.

And it sends me spinning
out of control
while maintaining the appearance
that all is well

well, well, well

the same familiar well
that I fall down
time and time
and time
again.

Only there is no Mad Hatter
or Cheshire Cat
only the Rabbit.

Reminding me
that I am

too late
too little
too much
too everything
you'll never love
to ever keep you.



F*****g rabbit


Only I get the trix
and you get the shotgun
that I've gift wrapped

just for you



to blow this wall
to smithereens.

Reviews

[Derek S.Keck]

Holy sh*t! This blew my mind. (Why is everyone I'm reading tonight making Alice references?) This is so cool! The contradictions; "too late, too little, too much",; the being what everyone wants you to be (or how your precieved). This is why I read poetry. You honestly are a poet to the tenth degree.

ps. Your style and form were amazing. Everything flowed so well!

[Kyle]

I like your style...I enjoyed reading this.

[Laughing-Bear]

My Dear Writing Friend,
You have painted a word mosaic that is vibrant with unique word combinations onto your poems canvas. This begs one to stop and muse for hours. The layout of your poem was brilliant; I would never of thought of laying out such a marvelous shape in a poem, that physical outline so grabs the reader’s attention and accelerated the poems point.
A beautiful work that’s a pleasure to read.

Blessings, Laughing-Bear

[She comes, when I call ..]

Wow. I love this! Very good imagery captured there.

[George Korolog]

I think I will go back and read this again with the Jefferson Airplane as background. Fun and full of raw energy. Loved it. Nice use of the page.

[Jake Staffeld]

I like it. Seems as if you reading Alice in Wonderland at the time, definently something I saw as I read it. The use of format is great, it pulls the reader in. Overall, at least a 100.

[J. Cole]

AHHHHH! I am all about poetry that moves! I love when people use new formats to demonstrate a point. I do it, too. Naturally, one of my favorite poets is ee cummings. I adore this. I don't even know what to say.

[Moflo]

I love how seamlessly this moves from one concept to another. The line "F*****g rabbit," is almost like the pinnacle of this work that just speeds up the tempo for a perfect ending. Great format as well, I like it a lot.