A Place For Emilio

A Place For Emilio

A Story by 20 Locks-Hustla Extraordinaire
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The beginning of a short story/screenplay. Enjoy!

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Our scene begins with a young six year old Abigail playing with her dolls on her bed.
The room is large and luxurious with many toys and shelves with books and trinkets.
The door to her room suddenly bursts open to reveal her stern father, Danté and close behind him a very fragile and timid maid, Therese.
Danté informs Abigail that in light of her mother Maria’s recent death, she is being sent to stay with her grandmother in Cordoba.
Abigail immediately begins crying exclaiming she does not wish to leave her childhood home nor her bunny, Emilio.
Danté, enraged at his daughter’s response grabs the bunny from its cage, stomps out onto the veranda, wrings its neck and throws it onto the grounds near a rose bush, then turns and points his finger at a hysterical and fearful Abigail now being comforted by maid Therese, directing her to pack her things immediately.
The next scene is a heartbroken Abigail traveling by train from Barcelona, holding a dark, locked box, staring out the window, her reflection staring back as we see landscape swiftly passing by.
And with the melancholic face of young Abigail, we now begin.
“A Place For Emilio”

© 2018 20 Locks-Hustla Extraordinaire


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A amazing story shared my friend. Had the feel of ancient times. You create situation and some hope. Thank you Anastasia for sharing your amazing story.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


Amazing! Very well written :) Love reading your work.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Even though it is a screenplay, or even more do, this needs the dialogue to support it. We want to feel the little girls pain, see how Dante and the maid interact. Great concept and start.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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great story,need to finish it up,it has a lot of merit

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your attention to detail puts the reader on site. The imagery paints a picture one can get lost in. Well done and consistent as always.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice description and scenes. Well done.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was an interesting screenplay to read, and very well written indeed :)
I hope to see more of this :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow I love this piece. Just in a couple sentences I experienced many emotions including those of resentment and sadness. I can't wait to continue reading what's to come! Well done.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is quite interesting... Great job!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good story ends up with moving to different scene, I liked it..

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on March 20, 2017
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