The day the earth stood still

The day the earth stood still

A Poem by SasukiMimochi
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The pain of the world? the thoughts of many? you interpret this poem as you see fit.

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The day the earth stood still
Not any, there was no will
Rain froze in its tracks
Making humans taken aback
Where angels flew not
And demons did not sin
Even those who'd thought to rot
It couldn't help, you're in what you're in
Tears held so delicately, in hands of gold
Sadness having not one prey
But millions, billions, that day
All, young and old, this story is told
Yet not everyone is affected
Someone greater was the cause
Now every heart, every soul is infected
Just for that one very pause
The day the earth stood still



© 2009 SasukiMimochi


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this sounds really good

i love the ending especially because it brings u back to the main idea and its just kinda sad, but thats what makes it so good!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Where angels flew not
And demons did not sin

I loved these lines here, this is wonderful, I wouldn't change a thing. I like this it's very well written the way it is.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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