Like Mother Like Daughter

Like Mother Like Daughter

A Poem by VannahBanana

Break even.
A drift in the river;

Like ice on my back,

An upcoming shiver.


I bite my lip,

Imposingly bitter.

Another strike on my back.

This lake in the winter.


It’s a mystery to why

I’d ever jumped at all.

But I knew instantly

Reality was worse than the fall.


Is it a fall if I jumped?

Did she jump, or did she fall?


Ice swallows me whole

As I go back under.

I’ve taken my soul

To a rapture that thunders.


Why should I break

Due to this stress?

What will relieve

This pain in my chest?


The beat to my heart

Has leaved me alone.

I call out her name

Which replies with no tone.


“Mom!” I cry,

But I swallow more ice.

“Mom!” I scream,

No one hearing my cries.


As my life unfolds,

I recognize this dream,

This dream to see the things that won’t be.


She’ll never be back.

She’ll never be known.

I’d rip out my heart

Just to have it re-sewn.


As the ice breaks,

My heart will race.


I spit and sputter

With no cries to mutter.

My mind hangs hollow

A break I’ll never follow.

© 2012 VannahBanana

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Your writing is beautiful, thanks for sharing.

Posted 8 Years Ago

Gives me goosebumps.
You describe things really well.
A very well written piece.
Keep it up.

Posted 8 Years Ago

It sends shivers down my spine. I've always had an unusual fear of drowning even though I'm a good swimmer. An icy demise seems even worse, cold in more ways than one. The sentiment in this poem seems to be that one met such a fate and the other has concerns of slipping down that same path. NIce, the first stanza sums up this story, aptly explained in the rest of the poem. Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago

Tragic tale, beautifully told. Sounds to me like the extreme someone goes to to answer question there will never be an answer for.

Posted 8 Years Ago

This is very powerful when it comes to emotional pain, and for that, I very much liked reading this. You seem to be a great poet, and this is a very well written piece.

Posted 8 Years Ago

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Added on March 4, 2012
Last Updated on March 18, 2012




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