Above

Above

A Poem by SavyNess
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Finding peace in our pieces

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     "Where are all our angels?"







"Up there" she pointed
"Above the birds and the bees-
higher than the sunshine and the breeze"

Heaven

© 2016 SavyNess


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The structure of this piece is interesting! I have to ask: Did you purposely put the Angels above the body and the word Heaven below? I only ask because of the BOLD lettering you used for HEAVEN. I find the structure Brilliant! And the conversational body of your piece is compelling. Nice work!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Short but sweet. I think the question you ask in the topic should be the first line. But that is just a preference thing, nice work

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SavyNess

5 Years Ago

Thank you kindly, I appreciate it very much. I agree with you, the revised version seems better.
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Lucien Maier

5 Years Ago

Yeah awesome, gives an overall understanding to the piece.

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Added on June 30, 2016
Last Updated on June 30, 2016
Tags: Angels, above, heaven

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SavyNess
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A Poem by SavyNess