Stupid me

Stupid me

A Poem by SimplyDisastrous

Stupid me,
I thought you cared,
all those nights you bared
through the pain of talking to me.

I was a fool,
to think that you'd
ever loved me.

how could I not see
that you wanted to be
with her and not me.


I thought we would be together forever
but you left no clue behind as to why you left whatsoever.



© 2010 SimplyDisastrous


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theres a good rhyme and ring to it. pretty catchy. your ending line put the finishing touch for me and you could feel emotion. you could have put a stanza in there describing the emotion and feelings you felt which would've made it so much better. also personally i dont really like the idea of placing abbreviated words in poems. good job!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I like this poem. It's sad, but you can still feel the pain you were feeling. I felt like this before. I liked everything about it. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Good rhyme in the last two lines, very clever. (: Wonderful job dear.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Excellent portrayal of feelings and emotions. Good rhythm good rhyme. I cannot ask for much more from a poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i think this is a very good poem

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I added this to my library. Just because well. I've been there. I've been hurt like this. Thank You so much for this.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I felt like I was totally absorbed into your head just then. I can relate to this I once had thoughts like this over a boy who pretended to care. And left me without even saying why or what. It is completely heart-braking to lose a friend. It just makes them so not worth it

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wonderful rhyme scheme and emotional.
Very well written as well.


Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

theres a good rhyme and ring to it. pretty catchy. your ending line put the finishing touch for me and you could feel emotion. you could have put a stanza in there describing the emotion and feelings you felt which would've made it so much better. also personally i dont really like the idea of placing abbreviated words in poems. good job!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

OH!Great! This poem shows the feeling of mine!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A moving poem that shows the fragility of the heart!
Answers sometimes prefer the shadows and moving forward is the only way, hard to do though!
Excellent poem
xx

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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SimplyDisastrous
SimplyDisastrous

Hartford, CT



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Hey. I used to be on here alot when I was 15. Now, not so much. I'm 18 now and I'm not nearly as depressing as I used to be, but still depressing enough. Message me and feel free to read my old poems... more..

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