Depression

Depression,

Casting shadows,

Sadness overtaking fast

It threatens to last

Forever.

Author's Note

Unfortunately, this WOULD be the perfect Cinquain form poem except the fact that the syllables mess with that idea (The traditional Cinquain is based on a syllable count). So, I guess it's just another regular poem.

Reviews

[R E Tree]

Wow this is a bit like a haiku. I don't care about the syallables the poem sounds so true and what can describe depression so neatly and short as that. It's like you ahve studied depression and tried to describe it all in just a couple of lines. Brilliant idea of making this and thanks for sharing

[Rachel 6sixtrümper]

Wow, thats all i can say is....WOW! this is exactly how i felt when i was depressed, stay strong. Back to the poem-- it uses such imagery that paints a picture of mental gloom, its amazing. Its so nice to read something from a young writer, like me, that isnt the typical rhyming sonnet. If you are depressed feel better and stay strong

[deeps]

I like this, I suffer from Depression.
Wonderful form to write this in.

[Ruth]

This is beautifully written, the old devil a lot of people know so well!
Wonderful write!
xx

[Kelly Taylor]

Even though it's brief, it still creates a lot of emotion even though the syllable count didn't turn out the way you wanted. I like how it winds up and the third line has the most, and then it kind of winds down in a way. It's almost symbolizing life itself.

[Mike O'Sean]

This poem though short, speaks to the heart. It speaks the truth of the speed of depression and the effects. We are shrouded in an aura of darkness in depression. If you do want to make it more like a Cinquain, you'll have to rework it entirely.

[Gianna Perry]

Don't worry about the syllable count, this is a great piece either way. Very true, very deep, and all from so few words. Excellent job, I love it. :D

[Alex Thomas]

Regular poems are okay. Cinquains are nothing special. Very raw emotional poem. Depression does "cast shadows". I have nothing to be critical of.