+fish+

huh?

the prize big black goldfish with the googly eyes
has jumped well out of the tank once more onto
the cold hardwood floor with an audible slap so
i am forced from repose into emergency action
again i will trap the slippery flopping miserable form
in the careful cup of my hand and drop him back down
into the tank with his oblivious calico schoolmates
although i suspect and accept this time will not be the last
after all he has not been the same since johnny cash died

Reviews

[Woody]

haha this is nice. love the ending. yeah goldfish are not stupid. just sentimental.
thanks for the smile.

[John Anderson]

this is very beautifully expressed. Well written with a nice flow and delivery.

[Steven]

I dig your writing man, it's like e.e cummings meets surrealism.

[ScaryTrees]

thank you. that is very nice of you to say. i will return the favor soon!

[Diane]

Well huh? I have a few ideas about this but would be to chicken to say what they are.. So I shall say thank you for the smiles.

[ScaryTrees]

don't be chicken !! i am glad you smiled :)

[Diane]

Thank you..I just get nervous as a reviewer:)

[ScaryTrees]

yeah i know. i like to give positive feedback more for sure, but we need more constructive criticism on this site. i quit posting here for a long time cus' outside of a few it became the "facebook" of writing sites.