Phantom of Nightmares

A dream journal
Is perhaps the most personal item a being can own.
It betrays our subconscious,
That misty area between good and evil,
Where all of our desires are fed.
And so,
It is with shaking hands,
That I turn the pages.
My pages.
My twisted, lurid, night visions.
I fear not my own mind,
For I own it, if not control it.
No.
What bothers me is that your name crops up on every page.
EVERY PAGE.
I’ve been dreaming of you every night,
And not even knowing it till now.
Perhaps I’ve gone to @#!*% ,
And have to live your torment over and over
Within the bars of my brain.
I’m still hung over as I wake up every morning,
Not recalling the night before.
These are the after photos of some kegged party,
Bearing my shame for me.
For I am not over you,
As my mind would not lie.
And I cannot forget you,
As you haunt me every night.
Phantom of nightmares,
Give me my peace.
Let my mind rest,
Untroubled in sleep.

Reviews

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Very good poem! I really enjoyed the message and you had a good rythme not to choppy at all. Only I'd suggest instead of captiolizing EVERY PAGE that you simply bold,italicise,use quptations or maybe even underline. Every one of those methods will make your poem look more professional. But the poem itself is very good i like the words you chose theyre very colorful and descriptive. The analogies bring it to life and the feeling pulls the reader in without fail. the content is wonderful just focus a bit on how it is read, aesthetics and some such things.

[Nicole]

thanks so much :) i've litterally only been on this site for half an hour, so everything is super helpful, and much appreciated!

[Harley (arbiter)]

i loved this. i can relate! in my head i was picturing it with a metal beat to it. kinda like "harvestor or sorrow" by metallica but different. great job! you mad a topic most are just sad about (even me) into something you completely despise and thats awesome

[Nicole]

it's less hatred and more pain, really. it's hard to move on when you just have to relive the same thing every night, you know? but eventually. eventually.

[Harley (arbiter)]

eventually we will be able to have that dream, and instead of by pained my it, be happy of it. i have to get over someone right now and its not easy when shes on my mind 24/7 but like you said eventually