Within Poets' Minds

Within Poets' Minds

A Poem by SeemsPoetic
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Slowly drifting Thoughts abound Frantic scripting Lines aloud Pain with purpose From poets’ mouths Emotions flowing Hear the sound Pen on paper Forever bound

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Within Poets’ Minds

By:SeemsPoetic


Slowly drifting


Thoughts abound


Frantic scripting


Lines aloud


Pain with purpose


From poets’ mouths


Emotions flowing


Hear the sound


Pen on paper


Forever bound


Human nature


Hear them out


Down to earth


High in the clouds


Vast Universe


Questioning now


Life and death


When and how


No rules allowed



Each of their lines


One slab of stone


But now a tower


Through their words


Feel the power


Whether peace of mind


Or darkness devour



Up late at night


The witching hour


So wide awake


With tired sighs


Challenging fate


Deep inside


Calm insights


And raging tides



Imagination


Their better side


Within creation


True knowledge lies


In every question


Double meaning hides



They draw it out


They shed new light


Thoughts on paper


Passing through time


Hand prints on history


They cannot die


Painting portraits


For readers eyes


True emotions


On the rise


Touching hearts


And changing lives



All is possible...


Within Poets' Minds

© 2018 SeemsPoetic


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You challenge a lot of oppositions within your poem. To me, it felt dream-like, these are the kinds of things that enter one's mind when they cannot rest, yet they need to. Your language and narrative work well, although I feel the enjambment detracts from your subject matter. It feel that the points you are making are not given the pause they deserve, and believe me, they deserve reflection!

I particularly liked the lines:
'Pen on paper
Forever bound'

You sum up perfectly what it is to be a poet or a creative soul. You are bound to your art form (whatever it may be) and you cannot exist in any situation without becoming inspired or taking something away to contemplate later. To be bound to words for an eternity seems a blessing; I wonder, do you agree?...

Best wishes,
Eliza


Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I like the style of this poem-- you make it work [not everyone does]-- congrats on your win.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

thanks for entry into my current competition, brilliant

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brilliant write. Bravo.. Nothing more to be stated.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You challenge a lot of oppositions within your poem. To me, it felt dream-like, these are the kinds of things that enter one's mind when they cannot rest, yet they need to. Your language and narrative work well, although I feel the enjambment detracts from your subject matter. It feel that the points you are making are not given the pause they deserve, and believe me, they deserve reflection!

I particularly liked the lines:
'Pen on paper
Forever bound'

You sum up perfectly what it is to be a poet or a creative soul. You are bound to your art form (whatever it may be) and you cannot exist in any situation without becoming inspired or taking something away to contemplate later. To be bound to words for an eternity seems a blessing; I wonder, do you agree?...

Best wishes,
Eliza


Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

brilliant write, thanks for entry into why i write competition

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The poet's mind. A dangerous place to know. I did liked the thoughts and the logic of your words. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Write your words. Part of being a poet.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Really hard to follow, given that there are no regular stanzas, no predictable rhyming, and short lines.

When you read this, intent guides how you speak it, and what meaning to take. But the reader has no access to your mind, so they have only what the words suggest to them. Given that, how does a reader relate, "Slowly drifting" and "Frantic scripting," when they have no idea of where we are in time or space or what's going on?

Next: if you're going to rhyme, then rhyme. But do so in a way that supports the rhythm of the piece, not with a rhyme tossed in here and there. Part of the reason for structured poetry is to make the reader a partner. The predictable stanza length and rhyming structure, plus what prosody does for the cadence of the piece, are important, just as it is to music.

A good introduction to structured poetry can be found in the Amazon excerpt to Stephen Fry's, The Ode Less Traveled. And a great introduction to the effect prosody and a strong rhyming scheme can have can be seen in Robert W. Service's, The Cremation of Sam McGee. It's over 100 years old now, and still great fun. This site has both the poem and an analysis of why, and how, it works:
https://www.shmoop.com/cremation-sam-mcgee/

Posted 6 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very nicely written write, enjoyed

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on February 14, 2018
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Tags: Poets, Minds, Thought, Universe, Night, Writers, Sleepless, Awake, Poetry, Poems, Time, Paper, Ink, Pen, Hearts, Imagination, Create, Words

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SeemsPoetic
SeemsPoetic

Green Bay, WI



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