escape

escape

 

minus my approval,

my mind lams spaceward

like an unruly child
through a midnight

traffic jam,

 

neon and porcelain

omens
steer the derelict sojourner

toward a redisigned

purpose,

concrete fractures;

allowing the liquid dream

to slither through.

 

as I finally tickle apogee,

I wonder what atrocities

have befallen the highstrung

cadaver I left lying, numb

in your hungry bed.

 

the stars explain

that this is the final trek;

I’ll never rejoin

with fleshy bedlam.

 

you’ll never understand;

I hardly existed

inside of your constrictive

embrace.

Reviews

[Kat Collins]

There's such a sad bitterness...and wistfulness...our minds never follow the straight and narrow. Part of me things it's a good thing...

I love how the structure and rhythm builds. It starts abrupt, small and expands only to slightly contract again. The constrictive embrace that only stretches so far and then snaps us back 'into place.'

[Amila Jay]

Awesome write :))

[Kenneth The Poet]

I love how you end this.

[Becky Clancy]

Wow...with your title of your poem, I was thinking of something completely different ._. But once I read it, I thought that it was really good :3 keep up the good work ^_^b

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong statements in this poem and I like the inner thoughts of this poem. Life is a road of lessons. I like the complete poem. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Reaper]

amazing poem.

[LonelySoul]

concrete fractures; allowing the liquid dream to slither through...Wow what a visual this paints! Awesome

[Marie]

Kind of twisted...you hardly existed...

[...]

You had my attention right off the bat. Every word choice was perfect. It had a very surreal kind of flow that I appreciate. Very nice work!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Teh venemous hit of the wording leaves the reader exausted and satisfied, well done, good read.

[Amer Almadani]

Powerful. I am baffled by it, truly am.
Thank you