Upon Julia�s Breast

Upon Julia�s Breast

A Poem by Marie Starr

 

His eyes did rest upon Julia’s breast
as she spoke or questioned or sighed,
until she shaved her head one day
to spite his wandering eye;
now when she speaks or quests or sighs
his eyes rest on her barren brow,
on the memory of her hairline
and the fate that awaits him now.

 
 
 
Published in Haz Mat Literary Review: Vol 7, Issue 2

© 2008 Marie Starr


My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

I like this. It is simple and honest and yet completely relate-able. I may just be a stereotypical male in that I have no apologies for knowing that in some cases it is hard not to be drawn to look at the breasts of a woman, but it is also not my intention to focus on them...It is an "ID" thing, and my deep down primordial mind is just urging me to look when my more advanced brain is just on autopilot. Therefore, if anything else can draw my higher functions away I am relieved, like looking at a hairline. I have had the experience a few times of a particularly attractive girl shaving her hair off, and that drawing my attention away from anything else. In my personal opinion, this is a wonderful snippet and complete in and of itself, but NONETHELESS, I kind of wish for more story line. Might this story be continued in another poem, like part of a series? For example, a series of snapshots -little short poems like this that all add up to a larger story, the way many movies from Hollywood nowadays interweave storylines. Look at Babel as an idea. (It isn't my favorite movie, but it is a series of little stories.)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Tusitala O'Neill

6 Years Ago

Yeah, women do often wear them "out" -loud and proud. Tonight I actually was in a funny position be.. read more
Marie Starr

6 Years Ago

yes. I like to leave things loose enough for the reader to interpret in their own way. it's that int.. read more
Robert Tusitala O'Neill

6 Years Ago

It is a unique aspect to your writing I think.



Reviews

I like this. It is simple and honest and yet completely relate-able. I may just be a stereotypical male in that I have no apologies for knowing that in some cases it is hard not to be drawn to look at the breasts of a woman, but it is also not my intention to focus on them...It is an "ID" thing, and my deep down primordial mind is just urging me to look when my more advanced brain is just on autopilot. Therefore, if anything else can draw my higher functions away I am relieved, like looking at a hairline. I have had the experience a few times of a particularly attractive girl shaving her hair off, and that drawing my attention away from anything else. In my personal opinion, this is a wonderful snippet and complete in and of itself, but NONETHELESS, I kind of wish for more story line. Might this story be continued in another poem, like part of a series? For example, a series of snapshots -little short poems like this that all add up to a larger story, the way many movies from Hollywood nowadays interweave storylines. Look at Babel as an idea. (It isn't my favorite movie, but it is a series of little stories.)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Tusitala O'Neill

6 Years Ago

Yeah, women do often wear them "out" -loud and proud. Tonight I actually was in a funny position be.. read more
Marie Starr

6 Years Ago

yes. I like to leave things loose enough for the reader to interpret in their own way. it's that int.. read more
Robert Tusitala O'Neill

6 Years Ago

It is a unique aspect to your writing I think.
amazing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LOL! THis is brilliant! I loved it. What a great read.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

382 Views
3 Reviews
Rating
Added on October 7, 2008

Author

Marie Starr
Marie Starr

Rochester, NY



About
Let's see ... a little bit about me ... I am a writer & artist & photographer & fool. I try to use my fractal focus and obsessive tendencies to illuminate the edges of invisibility. I can usually be f.. more..

Writing
Release Release

A Poem by Marie Starr