Tales

The stories we left

Unwritten

The places we knew

Forbidden

As once known

All things must go on

Those moments left

Counting

Of all that we learnt of

Resounded

The rhymes of our silence

The notes we could sing

Those books remain open

For another day

They often visit

All notations

Left open

Often forgiving

Those hands of time

Brushing by a cheek

Today

Life is not meek

After all

All that once was gone

Still reigns 

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

So very nicely put Serene the poetry that is yet to be writ beckons us always oh how I love those silent calls to penning

[Serene Star]

Thanks Robert :)

[Renée]

Life’s experiences, you captured many thoughts within your words. Like snapshots as I read. Nicely done.

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Thanks Renee

[Renée]

Was my pleasure 😊

[Unspoken poet]

The rhymes of our silence
The notes we could sing
Those books remain open

I LOVE this part, This is so very well written and nicely expressed

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Thanks Kay-T

[LJ]

Nice work! The impact of words is heightened by the format, which makes each phrase sort of hammer on home. And I like that it's optimistic and hopeful. Life is so interesting, and you show a slice of it here. This one part is the only part I stumbled on:

"Those moments left
Counting
Of all that we learnt of"

That happened because of the two prepositions. Try leaving both "of"-s off this part and I think you'll see what I mean. I'm a little sensitive to preps because I always have to edit them out of my own work! Also - why use "...learnt..." instead of "...learned..."? Maybe you have a good reason.

My favorite part is located here, the line about time:

"They often visit
All notations
Left open
Often forgiving
Those hands of time
Brushing by a cheek
Today"

I like - "Brushing by a cheek" - it's a lovely metaphor, and conjures a wonderful image of both time and narrator. Good! I guess you're aware you used "...often..." twice in this part? On purpose? That may be. Glad to read this piece and hope to read more soon. Thanks for a wonderful poem.
PS. And the photo is lovely.

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Cool
thanks for the review

[Pete]

yes, all things must go on. you speak of hope whatever life brings. very beautiful and full of deep sentiment.

The rhymes of our silence
The notes we could sing
Those books remain open
For another day

anything is possible. our tales are told and we are the authors. life is not meek - we can only fight the good fight and your words here are a winner ... :)

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Thanks Pete

[Eilis]

This is a lovely, spiritual sentiment, Serene, full of the optimism we need to help us keep going when life seems difficult. I particularly enjoyed the strength of expression in the last five lines. If all remains in spirit than we cannot actually lose. That is a wonderful thought.

Nice to read this uplifting message this morning. Also nice to meet you here at the cafe. Enjoyed your poem.

[Serene Star]

Thank you Eilis

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Another beautiful poem love your style

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Thank you julie