Exhale

Exhale

A Poem by Seriana

Exhale

 

Ethereal eternal presence,

 

standing tall against the hushed horizon line.

 

The western sky casts shadows amidst the energy of levied leaves,

 

watching as one silently floats downward to land at the alter ‘neath my feet.

 

Reverence of a grand life-force,

 

vibrating wisps towards the center of Mother Earth…

 

A breathless, magnanimous force as esteemed as She,

 

to let loose a reticent tear of one on the gentle breeze…

 

Another soon will fall,

 

cascading into a mighty waterfall of tears,

 

a peaceful, virtuous life leafing…

 

at long last, letting go…

© 2021 Seriana


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This poem is a symphony of word sounds! Your word selection is superb for the way the phrasing sounds when reading it. I almost had a love affair with your words, to the detriment of being aware of your message. That we might all find moments to feel this way, instead of grinding about whatever mess the world & our societies might be in! There's lots of this kind of beauty in the world that many people are missing becuz they're grinding about what feels crummy. I wish we could drink your poem & change the way we see & feel! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Seriana

5 Months Ago

Ahhh, Margie, thank YOU! That is the sweetest review. I am so glad it made you feel that deeply. App.. read more



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This poem is a symphony of word sounds! Your word selection is superb for the way the phrasing sounds when reading it. I almost had a love affair with your words, to the detriment of being aware of your message. That we might all find moments to feel this way, instead of grinding about whatever mess the world & our societies might be in! There's lots of this kind of beauty in the world that many people are missing becuz they're grinding about what feels crummy. I wish we could drink your poem & change the way we see & feel! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Seriana

5 Months Ago

Ahhh, Margie, thank YOU! That is the sweetest review. I am so glad it made you feel that deeply. App.. read more
"Ethereal eternal presence,
standing tall against the hushed horizon line."
Love this skybound yet earthbound homage to Nature and her profound beauty. Seriana your graceful, strong words well-describe this eternal paradox. Striking and sacred imagery, to me, make this a poem to remember. Thanks to you and thanks to Einstein Noodle for pointing me here.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Seriana

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much Annette! I'm overjoyed that this brought you beauty and something to remember. Tha.. read more
I felt the exhale...actually felt it. Great job!

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Seriana

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much! I'm so glad it touched you.
' The western sky casts shadows amidst the energy of levied leaves, ~ watching as one silently floats downward to land at the alter ‘neath my feet. '

How comforting yet extreme a reminder that from the height and breadth of life comes the most gentle and fragile. Fragility fed by every emotion, hidden, conveyed or displayed.. touch, tear and tenderness in equal measure, ' .. a peaceful, virtuous life leafing… at long last, letting go… '

Words to remember..

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Seriana

6 Months Ago

Em, thank YOU for visiting and sharing. Fragility, yes, so very much. In everything that is strength.. read more
emmajoy

6 Months Ago

Sending gentle but silent words, no need to explain them.
Wonderful words.. very beautiful....you are a talented poet I see.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Seriana

6 Months Ago

Thank you kindly for stopping by, and the generosity of your review. It is much appreciated!
To exhale, taken for granted, our part of life. Breathe in, breathe out it goes on and on as long as we live.
Breathe in all the delights that there are to behold and enjoy, to take in the fresh and the new. Exhaling the used, the stale and await the brief moment to replenish ourselves.

Take care - Dave

Posted 6 Months Ago


Has the sound of a life passing on to another plane of existence. The falling leaves alone suggest such. There are tears at the time of parting, but the overall feeling is one of peace. "At long last, letting go." In pace requiescat.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Seriana

6 Months Ago

Thank you John! What a great review! And you taught me a new word. Requiescat. :) Yes, the overall f.. read more
In this moment... when one exhales... the heaviness is released and the bliss prepares to be inhaled into the body and soul. Now... you know this so well... this is peace... the weight of the world falling away. Oh, that we could all embrace this place.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Seriana

6 Months Ago

Oh dear one, you know, do you not?
The release, the letting go. Would that we could all find .. read more
An owl on the moon

6 Months Ago

Yes.. may we all find it... flowing like a sweet river.
ohhhhhhhhhhhhh! i wrote a poem title Exhale as well ... i will have to see if it is still here and send your the link ... i love the whole concept ... so for sure your title has me hooked ;)
ahhhhhhhh the breath of life ... the epicenter of Hatha yoga ... the first gasp with a cry .. i love how you weave this into a spiritual, earthbound letting go .. exhale ... mmmmmmmmmm L3 grabs me .. it hints of politics and ancient history and myth ... women deserve and are, by some, most assuredly worshiped at their alters ;) that one tear .. beautiful .. focuses me on how pure it is ... as she cries .. there is certainly enough for her to cry about .. and the cleansing power of rain .. so Biblical and Naturalist Science like ... read it a couple times .. really got into this one .. lots of meat on the bones of it .. enjoyed the imaging of cleansing breaths and floating leaves letting go .. thanks for sharing .. its a good note for me to bid the Cafe' adieu for the day .. and take this feeling with me. :)
E.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Seriana

6 Months Ago

I am so honored by this gracious review, E. Thank YOU so very much for taking the time. It is apprec.. read more
Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

yes it does .. we just have to stop and ...BREATH ahhhhhhhhhhhh! ;) i have the Celtic Tree of Life t.. read more
Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

ps. couldn't find the poem ... its in hard copy somewhere ... if i find it i will send it to you or .. read more
As day cedes power to the night, we watch....and someone we are at peace. Beautifully written. Lydi**

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Seriana

6 Months Ago

Thank you Lydi for your wonderful review. I appreciate you!

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Seriana
Seriana

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