Fims World

Fim’s world

 

The story begins on a night of gray,

In trees where many fairies lay.

Stars hidden behind a foggy white in May.

Sounds of slumber in the hay,

All but one lay at bay even though some might pay.

 

His eyes lay closed even though

His ears hear every sound.

Skin as soft as cookie dough

With clear shinning wings that never touch the ground.

 

With wings that flutter in the night,

Fim has a chance to take flight.

A letter he seeks,

So around the corner he does peek

With eyes, a dark blue he looks around

To make sure he can’t be found.

 

His pointed ears catch a sound

On the right near the ground.

A group of mice he sees

None other than the king to be.

 

King of mice so strict and mean.

Fim takes flight so he won’t be seen.

King Mice beware.

They are frightful little creatures that never care.

 

Fim flies across the valley far

Until he comes upon the Parr.

An early fish near the sea,

Fim moves on until he comes upon the tree.

 

Inside two witches who see.

They are still fairy even though some might think it cannot be.

Friends of Fim’s who are valuable to him.

One with hair so white she is still younger than he.

Blue butter fly wings with yellow, pink and green,

And it’s the past she may see.

 

The other has waist long hair the color of midnight blue.

With two wings that have many cut INS,

But still they are the color of the moon that looks like glass.

Blue outlines the linings everyone sees in her wings.

She not much older than he

And it’s the future this fairy may see.

 

Fim is bright and cannot be deceived.

He carries the spirit of the old and the new.

His future concealed in the choices made by others.

Reviews

[Voice11]

I feel like this is more for a story than a poem. I can see where you tried real hard but some of the way you wrote it doesn't flow well.

[Rainbow Skank]

Lovely poem, it's my favorite one now!

[Ruby Moon]

its interesting =) but like the others have already said, it feels like it can still be expended into a story

[Noah]

Very descriptive. I enjoy how well it flows. I went into my happy reading place so great job. very few people do that for me. Awesome!

[Susan14]

Love the description and the emotions and feeling put into the piece. It is well written. The way the poem is written helps me see the image in my mind. Well done.

[Su' Nacnetaf]

I agree with Chase the Morning, this would make an entertaining story, great writing, sorry it took me a while to read it, I've been gone from the café for quite a while and now I'm catching up with the read requests ^^

[Luchia Noname]

i love it just by reading it i can see it in my mind its amazing :)

[Revenge<3'sMe]

I loved it. So beautiful it tells a tale. In fact you could probably write a small story or even a book after this.

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