Capter 9: Souless

I stare at it's grousome twisted beak, it's hallow eye sockets. It's amber glowing body giving an eerie relief to the darkness. Slowly I stand up so as not to alarm it.

"What is that thing?" I whisper to Joshua.

"I don't see anything." He says, clearly tired of my persistant question.

I keep backing my way out of the room, keeping my eyes on the ghost. When I am almost at Joshua and the door I accidnetlly step on what feels like my sister's brush. The ghosts head snap to face me, but it remains on the bed.

"What is up with you..."

"Shh..." I hiss at Joshua, "Not so loud. Maybe it won't notice us."

"Right, ok. Let's go." He says, but he obviously doesn't believe me because he procceds to yell "Catch you later ghosts."

The ghost launches itself towards us and barely misses Joshua.

"RUN!"

I start to book it to the start to book it to the stairs, but as I reach the top step I realise that Joshua isn't behind me. He is walking slowly after me, probably shaking his head at my "wild imagination".

I can see the ghost slowly stalking behind Joshua, his shillouette clearly visable in front of it's radiant body.

"Hurry" I shout at him, "It's right behind you. Joshua please listen to me."

But my pleads don't reach him.

"Please Seth, there is nothing there." He says as he turns to face it. "You're starting to worry me."

I watch in horror as the ghost gets ready to pounce at him, it's solemn face set in grim detemination.

 

The world slows as it launches itself at Joshua, but it doesn't make it. From the floor below another ghost emerges. It's huge gapping mouth swallowing Joshua whole. I watch as the green glow of what mut surly be his soul leaves his body and dissipates into the beasts own aura. An empty shell left behind. I scream but I can't hear it. Its all I can do to pull myself away from the horror that has just befallen my best friend. As I race from my house another dark thought enters my mind. There is no longer a heaven. These monsters, these solemn ghosts have taken even that away.

Welcome to hell.

Reviews

[Cheshire]

This seems like a bit of a rough draft, it could use a bit of proofreading.

Spacing on your new paragraphs helps readers focus on the writing more. As it is its a bit of a jumble, almost like two giant paragraphs.

Cool idea of a ghost attack, but needs a lot of editing.

[Eryn ♪]

Thanks, I'll make sure to fix it up. I appreciate the criticism it helps me write.

[ThoughtsofShyann]

So I have been reading I have gotten this far I LOVE IT!!!! It really has captured my attention great job!

[Eryn ♪]

Thank you so much, I'm glad you are enjoying it.