Doe Dum

Doe Dum

A Poem by Eryn ♪

Doe dum didily dee,
Close your eyes and count to three,
Doe dum didly doo,
Shivers come as the clock strikes two,
Doe dum didly done,
Cold steel knife as it drops to one,
Doe dum didly dead,
Cringe as the dog runs away with your head.

© 2015 Eryn ♪


Author's Note

Eryn ♪
I apologize for the twistedness, it was meant to be nice and then wasn't.

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jesus h christ this was scary but its so bloody good! (notice what i did there cause its all bloody in the poem). anyway, you made really good use of language n stuff here and it makes it flow really well.

fun (not really) fact for you: did you know heads remain conscious for 8-10 seconds after they are removed?

Back to the review...this is really awesome!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Funny how writing veers when permitted to take the helm. This is catchy, and really has the air of a nursery rhyme or a song for children (even with the dark undertone......let's be honest, nursery rhymes and children's songs tend to have dark undertones once the research is made, lol). Well done!

Posted 6 Years Ago


haha, I wouldn't worry about how it was supposed to go. It came out twisted but enjoyable to me.

Posted 8 Years Ago


but then life starts out to be nice, and then isn't.

lots of twists that twist us out of rhythm...and we often lose our head to angst and frustration.

"doo wah diddy diddy dum diddy doo"

"there she was walking down the street," and i lost my head and my heart.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Eryn ♪

8 Years Ago

Interesting take on it good sir. Thank you.
Oh my! A nicely written poem but a little creepy! I can't wait to read more of your writing as long as it isn't as violent. I agree it reminded me of a nursery rhyme. Then not.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Ew, that's spooky! At first it really reminded me of a nursery-rhyme, then it quickly reminded me of why they're used so much in horror movies! I like it, a lot, keep it up!

Posted 8 Years Ago


jesus h christ this was scary but its so bloody good! (notice what i did there cause its all bloody in the poem). anyway, you made really good use of language n stuff here and it makes it flow really well.

fun (not really) fact for you: did you know heads remain conscious for 8-10 seconds after they are removed?

Back to the review...this is really awesome!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Eryn ♪
Eryn ♪

Ontario, Canada



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I am 21 with red hair and aqua eyes. I face life one picture, one word at a time. Some call me odd, I prefer eccentric. I have fought my demons and I have won. I am known to have ADD. I move forw.. more..

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