Waiting For You

Wait for it....

I sit alone

Make fantasies

About the perfect man.

One who is fearless, not a d****e

One who's smart, not a show off

One who is kind, not self-centered

 

I'll meet someone like that one day.

Or maybe not.

Maybe we've met the one.

But we'll never know.

Author's Note

I got a bit bored, and I made this at school. So I couldn't really expand or do much on it without anyone bugging me. So, yeah.

Reviews

[Madelyn Defray]

It was short, sweet and I'm pretty sure very relatable for many girls, young women, and women. I like the format you have it in. Not only flow nicely but it's visually aesthetic.

If I were to give you any advice at all it would be to omit "d****e". Profanity often lessens the quality of a piece. Should you replace it with another word? Possibly. Do I like it there? Yes, because there are too many dochebags in this world who need to be called out as such.

Good job. :)

[Miguel]

Nice piece; short and simple. :) the idea is clear and easy to understand and you've chosen a topic that a lot of people can connect with. I can promise you that girls aren't the only ones who feel this way! I apologize on behalf of all the d*****s of my gender :)

Well done.
(Also, welcome to the Young Poets group! I'm looking forward to seeing some of your work on the page!)

~Miguel

[Taylor Ann]

It was simple, but got the message through beautifully. I"m sure all girls can relate to this. It was brilliantly written. I loved it.