Broken Promises

Broken Promises

A Poem by Wolf
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i have been filling very depressed lately tho i may not show it to those who know me best i felt like fuming and leting out my pain caused by someone i use to date

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Love can be misused and abused but you of all should know;

 

you said you loved me and then you told him that to.

 

Lies and broken promises lie in your wake;

 

your love forever will i forsake.

 

just living is a mistake.

 

© 2010 Wolf


Author's Note

Wolf
if you have any suggestions or comments please let me know

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I like this poem very much. Here is some tips to make your writing flow more first try putting more detail in to it
ex: Love can be misused,
Just like a thumping heart can,
But you all should know that,

When you said those dreadful words,
I Love you,
To another it sent my fragile heart,
In to a millions of pieces.

With those lies you said,
And promises you broke,
I lie there in your wake.

Your love,
Forever i will,
Forsake,

There is no doubt,
That living is nothing but a,
Mistake.

Note: this is from his writing i give the idea to him i just sowed him more descriptive idea of his poem.

See more things like that give more detail and feeling in to your poetry. I really like it though good job..

~Sunkiss2018



Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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That is a poem of an angry misused heart. Heal soon. I liked the darkness in it. Thanks for sharing.

-Wella

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sometime words have great meaning. Some words need to be said less unless they are true. Not just words lost in the wind and wasted. A short poem with a very good story. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


It seems like Sunkiss2018 has covered the suggestions part, so I will leave that there seeing as how i pretty much agree with what she said. This poem has deep emotions running through it which sometimes makes the best poetry.

-forever mine

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very painful and tragic situation that can make life feel like a mistake. I suggest filling it out more, expressing the pain, let the pain you feel pour out of you onto the page. Don't hold back. After that you can structure it into a poem or polish it as needed.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this poem very much. Here is some tips to make your writing flow more first try putting more detail in to it
ex: Love can be misused,
Just like a thumping heart can,
But you all should know that,

When you said those dreadful words,
I Love you,
To another it sent my fragile heart,
In to a millions of pieces.

With those lies you said,
And promises you broke,
I lie there in your wake.

Your love,
Forever i will,
Forsake,

There is no doubt,
That living is nothing but a,
Mistake.

Note: this is from his writing i give the idea to him i just sowed him more descriptive idea of his poem.

See more things like that give more detail and feeling in to your poetry. I really like it though good job..

~Sunkiss2018



Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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