Gloomy Lens

Of her gloomy lens.

Gloomy Lens

I cannot seem to see life through your lens:

You see through the eye of the hurricane.

For me: the sun’s always up; the clouds are always clear.

You called me a lame optimist, but why

Don’t you see that your catharsis was what drove you backwards.

I snore when I lay to rest.

Your slumber is oft restless and stumbled.

Your words scathe me;

Nothing but abrasive shards into my tender ego.

I oft find myself keening the blade,

Readying to slit that tongue of yours in half.

You seem to mistake sincerity for pity, and kindness for weakness.

I must depart.

I can no longer endure the nocuous brooding.

If I could foresee what’s to come, I would

See long strands of lonely gray curtaining that gloomy lens of yours.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"restless and stumbled.
Your words scathe me;
Nothing but abrasive shards into my tender ego.
I oft find myself keening the blade,"

[Sami Khalil]

It seems some people bring doom and gloom into our lives and others bring a ray of hope. You share with us that dark chapter but with new realizations. An excellent one great poet...:)....

[Shane Mohamed]

Yes. We must choose who we befriend wisely. Thank you Sami. Pleasure having you.

[Sami Khalil]

Pleasure is mine. Welcome muchly...:).....

[~]

What a great poem full of striking contrasts. It seems that the speaker has found a way how to detach themselves from the gloom that the other brings with them. Powerful imagery and livid pain throughout each verse. Wishing to read some happy ones from you soon :)

[Shane Mohamed]

Thank you Skittles. Waiting for the sun to shine on my end.

[~]

Biiiiig smiles and hug for you!! Joining in your wishes!!

[....................]

Sounds like you've misplaced the muse in a storm that has somehow fogged the lens through which you experience her experiences. Fear not, however, for soon the sun will shine to quell the wind and wipe the fog from the "Gloomy lens".

[Shane Mohamed]

You really think so? I hope you're right...

[....................]

Well, you've written this piece haven;t you? :)

[SleeplessVolcano]

Mmmm....forgive me for sounding pessimistic, but another's gloomy lens is not likely to change spontaneously......I may adapt myself, and ensure my sight is clear, but usually a serious intervention is the only thing which may ensure lasting, positive change.....brilliant writing, by the way....:)

[~]

ohhh it's The Cataracs :):)