The Devil in my Soul

The Devil in my Soul

A Poem by ShanZ-Turn
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I had written this some time ago, then I saw the picture and "needed" to combine the two...

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© 2008 ShanZ-Turn


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It definately works. If I'm not mistaken, the poem is about the devil being inside the narrator's soul but the narrator, as it turns out, has final say in his or her actions. As the text is set into the imge, I suppose there's no room for revision. But if you were to revise, however, I only have one suggestion to make. You have a very broad image here, but I think you could run even wilder with the description.

"The devil's f*****g my soul."

It begs to be decribed in some weird, grusome fashion. I thought so at least.

Either way, this poem is very effective and the image does set a pretty dark tone. Definatly keep up the good work.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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ohhhh i like this....very potent....very powerful...i like how its too the point no sense dragging on about nothing...it gets its point out perfectly though...and has great visual potential...love the end ...and love the font layout with the pic...very fancy lol

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Awesome!

Posted 16 Years Ago


Oh my stars, This is scary.
I think you need to c**k your gun--put on the whole armour of God and fight.


Posted 16 Years Ago


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Excellent! You nailed it on the head. Considering our earlier exchange about my "Stigma" and now reading this...you nailed it. I have always likened the hurt that I have felt like nothing that can be described except that the pain was in my "soul", my soul was hurting so bad it's like you want to amputate it. Perfect pictorial, perfect analogy and use of visual as well as words. again, Excellent
Ralph

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It definately works. If I'm not mistaken, the poem is about the devil being inside the narrator's soul but the narrator, as it turns out, has final say in his or her actions. As the text is set into the imge, I suppose there's no room for revision. But if you were to revise, however, I only have one suggestion to make. You have a very broad image here, but I think you could run even wilder with the description.

"The devil's f*****g my soul."

It begs to be decribed in some weird, grusome fashion. I thought so at least.

Either way, this poem is very effective and the image does set a pretty dark tone. Definatly keep up the good work.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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