B is for Brutus and betrayer

B is for Brutus and betrayer

A Poem by Infinite hexes
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this is a short poem about how Julius Caesar might have felt when he got backstabbed

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You betrayed me

How could I not see

The eyes of Judas

 

You are an enigma to me

The fifth columnist

You should be in sack cloth and ashes

To share, my brother and patches

 

My dear friend you are full of surprises

To gift me a dagger for my unarmed back

Manners, troth and love is what you lack

 

What an expert you are

A fine soldier who could kill the evil dictator

But you were also my old friend

And we played, fought and loved

Then how could you?

Give your ears to that devil

You and I both know what he is

I always knew that man had a passion

Love for the death of Caesar

Et tu Brute?

© 2012 Infinite hexes


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What a refreshing topic to write on. Julius Cesar never got the attention he deserved, I hope he's smiling now...all the books and poetry written about him today, he should be an amused spirit. Interesting use of vocabulary, my two cents would be to include a note to readers. Offer some definitions to words like "troth", and I would capitalize Devil and Dictator. Give them the respect they deserve. Nice work!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Infinite hexes

8 Years Ago

Thank you for a wonderful review. Yes I might a note to the readers :)



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What a refreshing topic to write on. Julius Cesar never got the attention he deserved, I hope he's smiling now...all the books and poetry written about him today, he should be an amused spirit. Interesting use of vocabulary, my two cents would be to include a note to readers. Offer some definitions to words like "troth", and I would capitalize Devil and Dictator. Give them the respect they deserve. Nice work!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Infinite hexes

8 Years Ago

Thank you for a wonderful review. Yes I might a note to the readers :)
Man I love Julius Caesar!!! It's such an amazing story, and a real insight to the inner workings and thoughts of a betrayer. The play is incredibly interesting and I could go on and on about it but then you'd get bored and angry and probably thow and old shoe at me which would ruin my day and maybe even bring out my evil side that I'm really trying to keep in control. Anyway :P
I really liked the first stanza. It's funny, but Brutus and Judus are always being lumped together but I think that although they both betrayed and essentially murdered someone, they're really not that similar. But this isn't what I wanted to talk about either :P Sorry I keep getting off topic.
Since it's kind've impossible for us to know how Caesar felt, I guess this could've been it. But considering his personality and actions while he was alive, I'd almost think that he'd have be really angry as well. But what do I know :D
All my complaints are completely irrelevant so just ignore them :P Great job!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The font used for your poem made it difficult for me to read. This distracted me from the body of your work and I think it would better serve to use a more conventional font? It is a good poem and I hope this helps?

Posted 8 Years Ago


With the font choice it was a bit difficult for me to read, not sure if this is just because I'm a dork or if others have this difficulty as well, either way it is def distracting to the poem itself.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Check your spelling. "Truth" Yup, poor old Caesar but there's a few betrayer's still running amok and not just in Rome. My advice, keep your friends close and your enemies closer.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Infinite hexes

8 Years Ago

No its actually troth. It means loyalty. And I do believe in that line.
Fabian G. Franklin

8 Years Ago

Hmmm, one usually associates "troth" with a marriage vow but it CAN be used in that context. I just .. read more
Very striking. I captures the feelings of the betrayed very well. I could sense the pain as well as a strike of disappointment in the stanzas... to be stabbed is to be expected but never from a old friend which makes one question which was truly painful... the blade or the stabber?

Anyways, awesome job but may I suggest you pick a more simple font style or a bigger font size, it's quite hard to read in my opinion and has a tendency to discourage readers...

Posted 8 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Infinite hexes

8 Years Ago

thank you, I will do that.
I bet that would've been something worth going back in time and watching

Posted 8 Years Ago


This had some momentum to it. I enjoyed the looking back thru Casar's dead eyes.
Good job.

Posted 8 Years Ago


To be betrayed by a friend is something shocking. I was wondering if you maybe typo'd the 'shack cloth and ashes' line or did you intend to write shack and not sack? Just curious.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Infinite hexes

8 Years Ago

oh thank you for pointing out that, I did mean sack clothes
and that line means that you shou.. read more
The betrayel from within your ranks your circle . Excellent write Et tu Brute... Lovely .

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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