Hand in Hand

Hand in Hand

A Poem by SheActsLikeSummer
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Love.

"
Hand in hand
A kite between
High above
A growing tree
Hand in hand
The awkward phase
Little teasing
Cheeks ablaze
Hand in hand
Bound by gold
Wedded now
As they grow old
Hand in hand
Withered beauty
But love thrives
As if their duty
Heart to heart
Hand to stone
Though he wishes
Is still alone
Soul to soul
As tree does perish
Two graves intwine
From a love once cherished

© 2012 SheActsLikeSummer


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SheActsLikeSummer
I hope you like it.

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Fantastic job!!! I say this every time but I cannot believe you are 13 and writing like this. So beautiful. The rhyme flows nicely and I love the structure...easy to read and take in. This circle of life poem is among your best I think!

I would only make one change, or not if you wanted another meaning

"From a love once cherished"
to
"Again now cherished"

Just to consider, closing the circle.

Very good job!! Congrats

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SheActsLikeSummer

8 Years Ago

Thanks so much, I really appreciate it. You have no idea how much this means to me. I'll consider it.. read more
BLBrown

8 Years Ago

No problem! I love to read your pieces...but I think you are 13 writing on 30!
SheActsLikeSummer

8 Years Ago

Ha ha, well hopefully I don't look it! :)



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this really touched my heart! I love the repetition and i like the picture for the icon (is that what you call it?) it was very well done and the flow was really good. Well expressed, i love the portrayal of the emotions here.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This was such a touching and sentimental journey you carried me on with this. The wording and it's visual quality was stunning. A veritable masterpiece in my book...Wonderful!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Just... wow. This is beautiful. Simply lovely.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Beautifully weaved.

Posted 8 Years Ago


It's beautiful! I love the repition used, it's a great poem and shows so much emotion as time passes. It's truly gorgeous.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Added on July 13, 2012
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Tags: love, hand, kite, tree, old, grave

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SheActsLikeSummer
SheActsLikeSummer

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I wish there was a single moment in my life that summed up who I am. Just a short snippet of time that I could copy and paste here so I didn't have to rack my mind for something to say. But I kind of .. more..

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