In the End

In the End

A Poem by SheActsLikeSummer

First it's ink.
Jet black, taking over
the edges of your vision
It starts in the corners
spirals like frost
and leaves you blind.
Then it's sludge.
Think and heavy making
every step a challenge
and every breath
almost impossible
as it traps your lungs.
After that it's persuasive.
Powerful and overwhelming
it doesn't hurt anymore
it forces you to believe
that you can't fight it,
you will lose.
In the end it's alive.
Clawing at you
Whispering to you
Wanting you to fall.
Because eventually,
you will.
You lose your footing
and take the plunge
into the ever growing
ever deepening
darkness of the end.

© 2012 SheActsLikeSummer


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This is so good. My favortie from you. The downward spiral, or so it seems? Depression?

Posted 11 Years Ago


SheActsLikeSummer

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much, I'm really glad you enjoyed it. And yeah, that's what I was aiming at but it's what .. read more
I really loved this! Your word choice is wonderful and your expression of struggle is phenomenal.

Posted 11 Years Ago


SheActsLikeSummer

11 Years Ago

Ha ha thanks, you made that rhyme. :) Or, at least, part rhyme. Either way, love your word choice. T.. read more
Life sludge..there is nothing worse.. You really did a great job expressing the depth and levels of struggle..xo

Posted 11 Years Ago


SheActsLikeSummer

11 Years Ago

:) Thank you.
Very Nice!

Posted 11 Years Ago


SheActsLikeSummer

11 Years Ago

thank you!
Good write, that uses enigma to good effect, leaves interpretaion open and so achieves a universal, threatening kind of feeling, good one.

Posted 11 Years Ago


SheActsLikeSummer

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much, I really appreciate it.
Is this an addiction - certainly could be applied to the various stages of a growing addiction. Intense and captivating write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


SheActsLikeSummer

11 Years Ago

That never actually occured to me while I was writing the piece but yeah, that makes sense. :) Thank.. read more
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Beautifully melancholic. I like the effect that it has, like you are trying to peel off from a part of you that can't let you go. Lovely writing as always.

Posted 11 Years Ago


SheActsLikeSummer

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much, I really, really appreciate it.
I take away something that reminds me of The Beatles. not sure why.

Posted 11 Years Ago


SheActsLikeSummer

11 Years Ago

Something I wrote reminded you of the Beatles?? Wow. That's amazing. Thank you so much.
this is very sad, dark, and reminds me of the song by Linkin Park. I like how each stanza seems to be a sentence, great I like the imagery that comes with it as well if i would suggest anything it would be that you put a couple of spaces in between the lines ever deepening and darkness of the end you don't have to it's just a suggestion. Otherwise really great job I enjoyed this poem.
96/100

Posted 11 Years Ago


SheActsLikeSummer

11 Years Ago

Thanks so much. I really appreciate it. :) I'll look into it, thanks.
SlightlyOdd

11 Years Ago

welcome

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Added on August 18, 2012
Last Updated on August 18, 2012
Tags: dark, end, first, then, after, ink, sludge, alive, persuasive

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SheActsLikeSummer
SheActsLikeSummer

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I wish there was a single moment in my life that summed up who I am. Just a short snippet of time that I could copy and paste here so I didn't have to rack my mind for something to say. But I kind of .. more..

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